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March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
u're back...and sorry to say i didn't haf time to review the latest chapter cuz i was busy but i'm hell glad sasuke came back to him. DIE OROCHIMARU!!!!! *cough* anywayz :) thumbs up for ur fics ^.^ pls write more often... i wanna see more actions from sasuke himself. how he's gonna make it up to naruto for all the nasty things he did to him *hrump* thanks :D
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March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*sighs contented* Just finished chapters 29-30. Wonderful new developments...I'm so happy I caught these updates! ^_^ Firstly, each chapter you produce just gets better and better, I really feel this is one of the best SasuNaru fanfics out there to date. *bows* Onto the review: Chapter 29 was superbly written, the character development has been amazingly portrayed, from the very first chapter, to then, I feel as if I've known these boys all my life! While your writing style was already wonderful, I've found that it has just improved over time...your pacing is smooth and your dialogue has a real-world grit to it. I *heart* this chapter so much. =^.^=
Chapter 30 was no exception, however, I noticed that the ending felt a tad rushed. Now, I wont complain if this is a plot device, because who knows how many more chapters your planning on writing. Yet, if this isn't the case, then it did feel rushed...no, I wasn't expecting some cheesy play on the boys running into eachother's arms & Naruto breaking down in the train station to whisper the sweet nothings he has been holding back. *chuckles* But the ending didn't leave me as breathless as I would almost expect to be with such a surprising twist at the end. Gomen...isn't it true that when your really great at something, people tend to have a more picky attitute toward it? >_< Anyway, my scruple didn't ruin the fact that it was another awesome chapter.
I have to say that your writing style, with the equel amount of raw depiction of events, and novel-worthy dialogue, always creates an autmosphere where I can visualize each scene. Its like watching a movie instead of actually reading a fanfiction for me! *giggles* That is what writers strive for - among other things ^_^ - but to bring the readers into the world they created so they feel its real, that this is how it was always supposed to be. Somehow, as fanfiction writers esp., you have to make the readers forget that it is indeed 'fan fiction'...and sell them into believing that this is a novel in the works! You have a beautiful hand here - always nurture it. *bows low* Looking forward to the next update! Ciao...
Once a fan, always a fan ~ Miya
Chapter 30 was no exception, however, I noticed that the ending felt a tad rushed. Now, I wont complain if this is a plot device, because who knows how many more chapters your planning on writing. Yet, if this isn't the case, then it did feel rushed...no, I wasn't expecting some cheesy play on the boys running into eachother's arms & Naruto breaking down in the train station to whisper the sweet nothings he has been holding back. *chuckles* But the ending didn't leave me as breathless as I would almost expect to be with such a surprising twist at the end. Gomen...isn't it true that when your really great at something, people tend to have a more picky attitute toward it? >_< Anyway, my scruple didn't ruin the fact that it was another awesome chapter.
I have to say that your writing style, with the equel amount of raw depiction of events, and novel-worthy dialogue, always creates an autmosphere where I can visualize each scene. Its like watching a movie instead of actually reading a fanfiction for me! *giggles* That is what writers strive for - among other things ^_^ - but to bring the readers into the world they created so they feel its real, that this is how it was always supposed to be. Somehow, as fanfiction writers esp., you have to make the readers forget that it is indeed 'fan fiction'...and sell them into believing that this is a novel in the works! You have a beautiful hand here - always nurture it. *bows low* Looking forward to the next update! Ciao...
Once a fan, always a fan ~ Miya
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay!! my prayer's been answered! i really hope sasuke didnt go, and he didnt!! hehehe.. i'm happy for them^^ *huggles the author*
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAY! Score one for Naruto!! I was so happy to see you update. Keep up the good work!
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok...this is going to be a bit long just to warn you ahead of time ^^
I've seen your fic months ago, but never really had the chance to read it knowing that I have at least a dozen chapters I needed to read before I reached the latest chapter. I kept delaying reading this fic...that's why by the time I read it, your fic already had 30 parts in it. When I finally decided to give this story a try, I just could not stop myself from reading it. I found myself reading one chapter after another for 5 straight days. I could barely do anything else when I'm at home rather than to read the next chapter. I was hooked. Each chapter was well written, not to mention showered with *juicy* moments. I loved the way Sasuke and Naruto's relationships developed. There were times when I couldn't helo but squeal like a hopeless love fanatic. I also loved some of the lines you wrote in here. I think I'll never forget them. What lines you may ask? One of them would be the lines Sasuke said when he went missing for days. *“I was on the roof, pretending I was a snowflake, I wondered if I jumped off the edge, if I would flutter down”. Sasuke wondered softly. * I thought that line was simply beautiful. That line conveyed so much emotion. My other favorite line would be, "Encounters are after all merely future farewells" I actually cried so much after reading that line. Its just...it hit a spot. It reminded me how painful reality can be sometimes. Anyway, I am ecstatic to say the least that Sasuke chose to stay. I'm really, really happy that I could stio grinning. Heeheehee...
I hope you don't mind the long review. I just thought that Spiral Falling deserved the best review I could write. Besides, this is my first and only review after reading 30 wonderful chapters! It's the least I could do. I also love the title by the way. I think it fits the story perfectly.
Well...I can't say anything else rather than the fact that I am insanely looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I love it so much.
I've seen your fic months ago, but never really had the chance to read it knowing that I have at least a dozen chapters I needed to read before I reached the latest chapter. I kept delaying reading this fic...that's why by the time I read it, your fic already had 30 parts in it. When I finally decided to give this story a try, I just could not stop myself from reading it. I found myself reading one chapter after another for 5 straight days. I could barely do anything else when I'm at home rather than to read the next chapter. I was hooked. Each chapter was well written, not to mention showered with *juicy* moments. I loved the way Sasuke and Naruto's relationships developed. There were times when I couldn't helo but squeal like a hopeless love fanatic. I also loved some of the lines you wrote in here. I think I'll never forget them. What lines you may ask? One of them would be the lines Sasuke said when he went missing for days. *“I was on the roof, pretending I was a snowflake, I wondered if I jumped off the edge, if I would flutter down”. Sasuke wondered softly. * I thought that line was simply beautiful. That line conveyed so much emotion. My other favorite line would be, "Encounters are after all merely future farewells" I actually cried so much after reading that line. Its just...it hit a spot. It reminded me how painful reality can be sometimes. Anyway, I am ecstatic to say the least that Sasuke chose to stay. I'm really, really happy that I could stio grinning. Heeheehee...
I hope you don't mind the long review. I just thought that Spiral Falling deserved the best review I could write. Besides, this is my first and only review after reading 30 wonderful chapters! It's the least I could do. I also love the title by the way. I think it fits the story perfectly.
Well...I can't say anything else rather than the fact that I am insanely looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I love it so much.
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I had found a link to this fanfiction from another site, which is why I'm not reviewing as a member of AFF.net.
And I got one thing to say- you made me cry. It has been years since a piece of fanfiction- hell, a piece of FICTION has made me cry, and you pulled it off. I love this fic and I hope you never stop writing it. It's beautiful. Thank you so much for writing this.
And I got one thing to say- you made me cry. It has been years since a piece of fanfiction- hell, a piece of FICTION has made me cry, and you pulled it off. I love this fic and I hope you never stop writing it. It's beautiful. Thank you so much for writing this.
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March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awwww....its happy again ^_^
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March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
BiG GooFy smile! lol awwwwwwwwww, not only was the chapter, extremely hot, but I loved how it turned out! Awwwwwww I can't get over it! lol Okay Okay, good Work! and Keep updating!
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March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMGGG WAAIIIIIHHHHHHH *glomps onto leg* OMGOMG <333333
Ommmgg you have to updatee *squeels*
This is so my favorite story, well, its been BUT STILL!
OMG PLEASE UPDATE SOON >____<
<33 Shizuou <33
Ommmgg you have to updatee *squeels*
This is so my favorite story, well, its been BUT STILL!
OMG PLEASE UPDATE SOON >____<
<33 Shizuou <33
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March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^^ one of the best SasuNaru/NaruSasu fics out there.
I love how you don't make Naruto an uke all the time.
T.T I wish I could write as well as you!
Anyways, keep writing SasuNaru! I learn some more that way^^
I love how you don't make Naruto an uke all the time.
T.T I wish I could write as well as you!
Anyways, keep writing SasuNaru! I learn some more that way^^