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NOOOOOO! I am not happy. How long are they going to be apart? Please, let them get back together soon. OK, now with that out of my system, great writing, great chap, but I still want them to get back together, they will right?

UGH! Thank GOD! *beats the frickin shit out of oro-bastard* gahhh!!! I had to re-read the previous chapter so that I would be in tune with the latest chapter...and GAH I shuddered SOOOOOOO BADLY! when i got to the oro part that i just skipped that piece of shit lol. ^^;; and normally, God, I do NOT curse :P But that part *SHUDDERS*! AHHHHHHHHHH! lol Anyway, thanks for the angsty chappie *cries* but it was so good. I mean, I love the Ran and Naruto bonding moments...those are soooo fulfilling to me. It's like...even though Ran can't make up for the space that Sasuke made empty by leaving, she's still doing something you know. I mean, that's just...awww that's just really nice :) I'm glad Ran is becoming reasonable again. I hope she doesn't betray him once he starts to really trust her. I'm so sick of people betraying Naruto, you know? It's just so...so sad :( My poor Naruto-kun...I wish him health and safety and long life with lots of love, even if it isn't that Sasu-bas****! GRR :D lol Go NARUTO :D Great fic ;) better tie oro's hands behind his back with a magic jutsu so that he doesn't touch that idiot Sasuke. :P keep it up girl, make the updates faster ;)

nice job. I like how the story is developing. keep up the good work

a new chapter..*sighs* .. poor naruto,he's hurting really bad and thatsasuke,well he's the one being selfish,always unreasonable.. *sniffs* ... its really sad..this fic will have a happy ending right?with them together right? *sobs*soo sad,but soo good..please update more..i am willing towait.. *sniffs* ...

is that sasuke giving head to orochimaru??? argghhh!!! dont tell me they fuck too??

this is one of the first fanfics I've ever read and still remains one of my favorites, Please update soon, this is like the third time I have reread chapters from here and I can't get over the suspense as to what will happen next

at last,i have read all the chapters, and now i can review it..wow.thats the only word i can describe this fic...its very well written..i hope you will update it sooner..

*smiles*

meow2x

this has become one of my favorite naruto fanfic of all time! the characterization is original, the setting, while not entirely groundbreaking, was somehow fresh and the progession of the relationship between the main characters feels natural. this is quite a long fic, and still in progress as i write this, but somehow the chapters seem to fly by without me realizing it! well-written and from where things stand there seems to be more plotline to be revealed!

keep up the good work ;-)

eeep!~ i haven't been keeping up!~ i've been bad
nooo!~
>.<
oh well
now that i've caught up..
WHERE'S THE NEXT CHPT???
;)
teeheheee
i just love this story sooo much
please keep writing!~ and i hope to read the next bit soon
=3

I read the whole of this fic in a couple of days and I'm really enjoying it a lot. I saw places here and there where it wavered a bit, and sometimes I wondered if I was reading a Fruits Basket fic but, overall, it's really very good, especially the human insight we get in some of the scenes. The characterization is also quite good, especially for an AU fic; in its own setting, it works perfectly. The smut is great and also adds to the fic. You really did manage to weave it into the plot in a credible and enjoyable way, a way where the emotions showed through, even. Really very good, even if when reading it on one sitting it seems like they spend a lot of time making out. In real life is like that anyway, but it didn't detract too much from the story. Don't get me wrong, I'm a huge smut fan and I liked what I saw here - a LOT - but some times at the beginning it all blurred it together into a huge make out scene and a few things I'd like to have found out where left unsaid.

Towards the later chapters I was properly suffering with Naruto when Sasuke broke things off, and I suffered all of the days that followed; my stomach was physically churning, and that's saying a lot. I commend you. Somehow, I'm not seeing enough motivation for Sasuke here, though. In the manga I can understand what he's doing because of his tragic past and his resolution to avenge his family and his clan. The motive there seems even unselfish to a point, and even though what he has now is not a whole lot better, it seems really foolish of him to break things off so easily. What's more, he doesn't seem all that affected by it. I know it's an AU and things take their own twists and turns but it pisses me off to see him act so foolish and selfish and I want to kick him; not to mention how cheapily he whored himself out to Orochimaru - what the hell for? Where's his pride? His self-respect? I'm confused. Didn't what he had with Naruto mean a lot to him? More, perhaps, than the approval of his family? Does he need so much reassurance? What is he trying to prove and to whom? He grazed rock bottom there for a moment, he was cheap and nasty; but I'm sure you have answers waiting for us and I'm looking forward to reading them :D

I also enjoyed the last chapter and the scene with Ran. You stayed true to Naruto's character there and showed us all a lesson in humbleness, very much in the spirit of Naruto, I loved it.

I liked how you weaved the rest of the characters in the plot and I enjoyed Jiraiya a lot. I think I could see some of yourself in the character there, in the conversation about smut with Naruto - a little of yourself and any writer who aspires to master the art of porn writing :D I'm looking forward the coming chapters.

I'd like to have said more, but I'll be here forever. Best of luck with the writing.