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ooo!! BUSTED!! CAUGHT IN THE ACT!! ^_^_^_^__^ LOL!! UPDATE!! more lemonyness!! ^_^ gotta update soon! ^_^*hugs!*

its simple, if you do not continue i will shoot you.

wai! it's so cute.... :3

The first chapter was good, but then it seemed that you rd itd it after that one. cute story though

Hmmm. Eh, it seems that you're revealing a little too much--Sasuke being bisexual doesn't exactly need to be focused on at this point. It makes things very easy. Also, guys, unless they are happily drunk or flamboyantly gay, don't giggle. They chuckle, snigger, snort, gaffaw, chortle (eeh), and snicker. But they don't giggle. Not reallnd end even though this is an alternate universe, it doesn't really give you an excuse to write it so... immaturely. It's shallow, cliche, predictable, has no real style, finesse... and your grammar's bad. You wrote this as if you were had the attitude "Oh I just can't WAIT for these two to get it on to the hot mansex so I'll completely forget about character development and write mediocre, unoriginal smuck instead of really considering how I could make the best out of ide idea." Mostly, just rushing to the mansex. Really, by the way that you write this, you're presenting yourself at just a level or two above the social and mental status of Sakura and Ino in this fanfiction.

What a great thing you have going for yourself! You get two stars.

lol omg i've being dying to say this
SASUKE GIGGLES!!
hahahahhahHAHAHAHHAHA
*whistles innocently*
teehee
thats soooo cute
^^
thish ish sucha cccuuuuttees sttooorrrwwwyyyy !!
=3333
AND LOL unnaturally OOC itachi
nice itachi?
O.o
sscarrryy
not that its a bad thign or nefing lol
XD
update soon!

interesting
continue!

*claps* More more! Good first chapter I like it! lol mystery person indeed *wink wink* :P