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dum dum daaaaa!
whoohoo talk about ur cliffhangers!!!

This story is really interesting. A lot of focus on OC's, but I like the plot anyway.

Keep up the good work!

~Angel

well I've read both this and 8 ways to hell up to date. I'm extremely interested to see how both will turn out, But this one more I think. I've really gotten into the story and wonder exactly whats gonna happen. I mean I have an idea but I want to see more lol in any case damn good work, I'll be rating both of them here in a second, 5/5 for both.

If you write it. They will read it! Then they will like it. Love it, and want more of it!!!!!!!!!

Most wounderful story of the pair.

This ones a real keeper. Don't stop writting on it. The story of the year!!!!

WOOHOO! I am so glad you updated again. I have been reading this story for a long time and I was worried that you had let it die. I am glad that you are going to continue it. Please update soon!

Realy good! i hope you continue^^ i like the concept of a new hidden village

First off, though it may be an interesting idea, I can't get over how badly the punctuation is. I don't like writing flames so consider this constructive criticsm that you may want to use for at least the first couple of chapters. I couldn't even bring myself to read the other chapters because I was so confused at what kind of emotion you were trying to put into the character's sentences because nearly everything ended with a question mark. That's just not natural, or good grammar. I'm sorry if I'm sounding harsh and I'll check out the later chapters just to be sure of my statements but I think you should really take the time to change that in the first few chapters. It simply looks really bad. Other than that I think you're a good writer and this idea is pretty cool. I'll admit though, mostly I just like the idea of the Hyuuga clan being all but wiped out, LOL. Sorry, that was a bit morbid. Oh well, I hope you take my critiscms to heart and don't think I'm just trying to be mean.

Lol... yeah i'm reviewing my own fic... -_- Its funny reading this story through and how my ideas changed as well as my writing style it seems... but as with most of my works its either love it or hate it.... *shrugs* I'm trying to give it a proper pl ot though now... and to those who are kind enough to properly give constructive criticism ARIGATO!!! I'm just glad people out there like the story enough to stick with it! Be patient, be kind, and enjoy!