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Oi Vey! YEah sorry about the holes in the plot. I know they're there... but i kinda wanna finish up the story cuz my goal from then changed from my goals now. If i spend time fixing them all (And i know excatly how i plan on fixing them up...) The story will never get done. So please hang tight... the hard part was keeping Ayumi at the side... not exactly the center which is the flaw in most OC fics... SO PLEASE JUST LET ME FINISH IT... as for the whole "Ayumi with no confidence" That will be explained by the end. TRUST ME i've mapped it out!

I like your ideas and the relationship between Ayumi and Hinata (it's amusing to see them acting with a hint of boy-crazyness), but you leave some holes when you write. For example, in chapter three you wrote that Tsunade had to see Neji in the hospital because he had overused his eyes, yet when Naruto went for breakfast, Neji was there and his eyes were okay. Also, I don't understand why did Ayumi and Hinata remove their blindfolds when they attacked Shika and Chouji. What was the point of it? Even wearing them, they were obviously superior. Finally, I don't get how can Ayumi lack self-confidence when she was the one to teach Hinata her new ways.

i like it nice job there

oooo nice one here ill check back

Ooooh i like how this is goin, i hope Naruto can get a second chance with Hinata, they deserve eachother and a bit o' happiness

This is a great fic! I love NaruHina in general but I've never seen one where Hinata can actually be turned into a normal girl (without the shyness etc).

More please!

Great story. I wonder hoji aji and Hanabi will play a part in this story concerning Naruto and Hinata. Please continue.

looks like a good beginning. I will watch for updates.