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This sounds so dark and exciting so far. I love Jiraiya!!! Never enough Jiraiya fics. Jiraiya and Iruka, now there is an interesting pair. Go for it. I like how you wrote everything so well. It was intense. cdk

Wow! This fic is so original! It's very cool and well written... hmm... I think JiraiyaxIruka could be interesting! But what about Naruto? Neji or Sasuke? ^_^; Don't keep us in sespence too long! I can't wait for more.

Wow! This fic is so original! It's very cool and well written... hmm... I think JiraiyaxIruka could be interesting! But whatut Nut Naruto? Neji or Sasuke? ^_^; Don\eep eep us in sespence too long! I can't wait for more. EDIT: NejixNarutoxSasuke Threesome!!! XD <.< >.> hehe ^_^;

i really like your story so far. as for pairings go...i really like sasu/naru or even sasu/naru/neji. but i as for any others i think i would wait until the story deepens and other characters are introduced.

This is a really good story! I feel so sorry for them! Please write more soon!!! I like this

Lovely start. I see wonderful potentials here. I can't see Tsunade as such a bitch, but its an interesting plot.

Pairings. I'm all for SasuNaru, but since Neji's here, why not Sasuke/Neji/Naruto? It'll be mean leaving Neiji out XD

Again, great plot. I'm interested to see how this turns out. Definately reading the next chapters.

OMG! OMG! OMG! We like your fic lots! ^^
((key: Normal writing = Excell-sama, Lina's yami. <--(talk) = Lina commenting on what Excell said.))

Pairings that could be so far (semi x uki):
Sasuke x Naruto <--Please! I love these two together!
Sasuke x Neji <--They look really cute together.. Common.. I know you wanna picture it..
Neji x Naruto <--By how you had Neji react, it makes sense, ya'know?
All three together <--Hell ya!

Big no way please:
Jiraiya x Ikura <--That's just taking it WAY too far
Jiraiya x Naruto/Neji/Sasuke <--Since when is Jiraiya a gay petofile?
Ikura x Naruto <--Dude, he's Naruto's father figure.. That's just.. ew.

You could bring in:
Gaara <--It'd make everything a hell of alot more interesting..
Kiba and Akamaru <--Kiba is like, Naruto's brother! I know you wanna bring him..!
Shikamaru <--You're really gonna leave the genius out of the group out of the loop!?
Lee <--It's just a suggestion.. *sigh* Gai would want to come too.. Nevermind

Pairings because of new people (semi x uki):
Gaara x Neji <--I love these two together! XD
Gaara x Naruto <--Kyuubi and Shukaku!
Gaara x Sasuke <--They just look sexy together ^^
Shikamaru x Kiba <--Are we the only people who think they look sexy together in dous?

Please no:
Sakura <--She'll dis' Naruto and hog Sasuke! ><##
Ino <--She'll hog Sasuke and Shikamaru! ><#

So good! You write with such ease and the words just seem to flow. I've read many pieces with rhetorical comments/concepts incorporated and have found them either too flowery or too unrealistic (mine included. hehehehe). But you've truly captured the essence of enslavement without being either of those things. I find that very impressive. Please keep this up. I'm looking forward to your next update. Oh, is there any way to be informed of an incoming update?

Really awesome story!!! I think it'd be even more awesome with a Sasu/Naru pairing ^^. Anyway, that's my vote and... I wonder what's gonna happen next... the story does seem really interesting. But more importantly, Sasu/Naru!!! ^^;; Anyway, update soon.

I think Gaara and Shino should join.. Gaara knows how the others feel..