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the first Tsunade/Jiraiya ficcie I have ever read, it was good! I hope to see some more het pairings from youthe the future. sorry I am not more verbose, am on allergy medicine, just wanted to let you know I read and I liked

That was pretty good. There ought to be more Jiraiya/Tsunade love, thanks for writing some, it's badly needed. I like Tsunade-sama's comments at the end, it was cute.

Oh, I LOVED this story! It was my favorite character in all of anime, who is largely neglected by the fandom, it was short and erotic and yet meaningful and emoal aal and definitely not shallow, and it left a sense of closure while also leaving the end open for more to happen!

BRAVO!

And, though few reviewers go so far as to actually say this out loud: the sex scene was good. Good descriptions of feelings and sensations. Awkwardness indeed created realism, though you were a bit too heavy on the awkwardness-- Jiraiya should be experienced enough know better than to dive right in without any real heavy foreplay. And look what happened, baka! Nice guys don't finish last, but they make sure that their nice girls finish first. Next time "prime the engine" a bit.

But that's a detail. Well written!

Alright, I flat-out LOVE this fic! Thole ole thing about there being a definate reason why Tsunade didn't have sex with Jiraiya but her not quite remembering what it was really grabbed me. Even at half her age, I look back and wonder like that sometimes. Also, I liked Jiraiya's pondering about the fact that he might have ied ied her if things had been different; fic writers tend to forget his serious side. The atmosphere was excellent, both Tsunade and Jiraiya seemed really in character, and I completely adore how you fit these two together as a couple. The sex scene was flawless! There were a few times when I had to pause and figure out exactly what you were trying to say (the phrasing was a bit off), but the plot was so plausable and flowed so well that it really didn't bother me. The best Naruto het lemon fic I've ever read! Hope to read more from you soon!!

Still like the story, and appreciate the fact that they /do/ make mistakes, and aren't stinking drunk when they finally have sex. Such a nice cha.. a..