schedule
October 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. A little confusing, but it's still good. Can't wait for the next chapter.
schedule
July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You know a while ago I was asking myself "Why am I reading a Yuri or even why I had a Yuri in line to read?' Because its been forever sence I've looked at the storys I have lined up to read. So I went back to your main web page to read the sum. Found out why. It looked intresting but I don't read girlxgirl only guyxguy or guyxgirl I saw your story had other different froms of sex so I dicided to read it and skip the girlxgirl sence(sp). I hope there not important. Other then that I LOVED your story lol Sex deprived Naruto. Damn thats one I bet no one would come up with. and for so long I'm suprised he didn't hump everything in sight. lol
schedule
October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this is a very good story. this is the kind of thing that can keep going for a while. so please put up more chapters. i NEED to know how it turns out
schedule
September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the story and how you make him die is something of an unkown way but in any case how did Naruto die fighting Haku and what is going on... He is back in Konoha after two years of the fox has attacked and he is only two in that world.. Why is he going to find Hku and her Mom for.. She is too young if I am not mistaken... I hope to see an update from you soon.... What is he going to do to all the women after he gets them for himself.... E-mail me at JTB8834@aol.com
schedule
August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Um, ouch. my head hurts now, no offense, it's a good plot but you've made it way to confusing, you need to start a new paragraph when a character speaks or thinks to make it a little easier to read and understand.
schedule
July 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The idea and the way you wrote all of is very interesting and i really like to continue reading this. The lemon was good to but i think you could expand alot and with all the pairings i suppose youll get better with practice!
schedule
July 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
its good, though you dont really explain how he "Died" on the bridge in wave country and yet comes back 2 years after he was born, this means all the things that he watched happening in the "pool" while he was in the deamon world havnt happened yet. but all in all its a good story with a good lemon in it... keep it up ^_^
schedule
January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
gREAT FIC! MORE!KEEP WRITING AND UPDATE SOON!
schedule
December 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update this story is fantastic
schedule
December 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow my friend was right this story does have a lot of potential please update soon this is a realy great begining