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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great storie i enjoyed it greatly and could you e mail me where to find that other stories at exactly please
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah for hating Sasuke!
Also, I really enjoyed this fic. Clearly written, nice grammer, interesting take on a subject,all in all well done.
Also, I really enjoyed this fic. Clearly written, nice grammer, interesting take on a subject,all in all well done.
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September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finally, a fellow Sasuke hater, Sasuke's a dickhead and that's that. Liked your story by the way, very well written.
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August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a good fic, you should really consider finishing it. Dropping it would be a loss.
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hate Sasuke, too. I don't understand why anyone could call Sakura 'annoying' in contrast to that punk! >=D
Lovely writing~
Lovely writing~
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome! and I hate sasuke too! the tratior! cool story.
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April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Write the next chapter!!!!!!!
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad at all i hope u update this soon. yah i can see y u hate sasuke so much. i REALY hope he gets kiled by his bro. its not that i hate him it will just help the anime along well i better stop im rampling. update asap please
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February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah for Sasuke hating! ^__________^ I hate that jerk too!
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January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am greatly impressed by this piece. I agree there are not all that many Saku/Naru pairings out there, but this one argueably makes up for the shortage.
I am not sure how I feel about Sasuke-and no I'm not trying to be difficult- but as a writer I must credit you with doing the character a great service in justifying his flaws and evolving him from a troubled youth into an abusive adult. It is a solid piece of character development and one thing that I personally value greatly in fanfics is how interpretation of accepted canon of the series/book/movie can be interpreted to create a plausible situation. Some of the Sasu/Saku writers out there interpret his demeanor as more of a protective shell that eventually is shattered by the purity and strenght of Sakura's undying love; once again this as nothing more than a matter of interpretation and writing skill determine the plausibility of the story. The Sasu/Naru relationship is fairly cliched, you on the other hand, chose the road less traveled and executed the work with aplomb and a great deal of heart.
The erotic bits are very evocative and emotional -which is what makes the difference between smut and erotica, at least in my opinion- the use of first person narrative is a bit unusual and a welcome change of pace, add to that the change of character narrating the tale and it achieves a subtle element of literary style that most people pay for at their favorite paperback store.
Are you planinng in writing some of the remainder of the story from Sasuke's point of view? If so, godspeed. In my personal experience it is much harder to write from a disturbed or villanous character's perspective and make it convincing, since most of us are fairly well adapted (that is, unless you are writing all this from some correctional facility out in Texas or something)
Hope to read the next chapter soon.
P.S. For the record I am rather fond of the Naru/Hina pairing (personal, life experience motives weight in this matter) and while I grive a bit for the girl, it was a nice touch to use this relationship as background color for your current story.
I am not sure how I feel about Sasuke-and no I'm not trying to be difficult- but as a writer I must credit you with doing the character a great service in justifying his flaws and evolving him from a troubled youth into an abusive adult. It is a solid piece of character development and one thing that I personally value greatly in fanfics is how interpretation of accepted canon of the series/book/movie can be interpreted to create a plausible situation. Some of the Sasu/Saku writers out there interpret his demeanor as more of a protective shell that eventually is shattered by the purity and strenght of Sakura's undying love; once again this as nothing more than a matter of interpretation and writing skill determine the plausibility of the story. The Sasu/Naru relationship is fairly cliched, you on the other hand, chose the road less traveled and executed the work with aplomb and a great deal of heart.
The erotic bits are very evocative and emotional -which is what makes the difference between smut and erotica, at least in my opinion- the use of first person narrative is a bit unusual and a welcome change of pace, add to that the change of character narrating the tale and it achieves a subtle element of literary style that most people pay for at their favorite paperback store.
Are you planinng in writing some of the remainder of the story from Sasuke's point of view? If so, godspeed. In my personal experience it is much harder to write from a disturbed or villanous character's perspective and make it convincing, since most of us are fairly well adapted (that is, unless you are writing all this from some correctional facility out in Texas or something)
Hope to read the next chapter soon.
P.S. For the record I am rather fond of the Naru/Hina pairing (personal, life experience motives weight in this matter) and while I grive a bit for the girl, it was a nice touch to use this relationship as background color for your current story.