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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry - i thought i reviewed last time.
My comment last time was regarding Kabuto and how
he seems to be both similar and different than Orochimaru.
He cares about the village, but then again,
any part of his plan that has become useless is discarded.
This time: I loved the way you got Hinata and Naruto back together.
It felt right. And I hate you for your cliffhangers. I'd curse you and
make you suffer in your own personal hell for all eternity, but then
you wouldn't be able to finish the story. So look foward to hell after
the story is complete. lol
My comment last time was regarding Kabuto and how
he seems to be both similar and different than Orochimaru.
He cares about the village, but then again,
any part of his plan that has become useless is discarded.
This time: I loved the way you got Hinata and Naruto back together.
It felt right. And I hate you for your cliffhangers. I'd curse you and
make you suffer in your own personal hell for all eternity, but then
you wouldn't be able to finish the story. So look foward to hell after
the story is complete. lol
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May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool. I was wondering when the two lovebirds were gonna work things out. A depressed Naruto makes for a depressing story. Personally, I think that Roiyaru shoulda gotten his ass kicked by both Naruto and Hinata, then by all the others that were present at that meeting when they were done with him. I sure hope the little punk knows his place now. Killing Naruto would've incurred not only Hinata's wrath, but also the wrath of the rookie nine (Sasuke would just torture him until he screamed for bloody death, only to have Sakura heal him to be tortured again), the other's whose lives Naruto touched (including Sabaku no Gaara) like Neji, etc. Geh, now I'm rambling. Anyway, cool chapter, get the next one out soon, and I'll be around until then.
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
"Okay so this chapter is kinda short, live with it. Got lots of school and laundry to do?"
You mean... there's life.... in places other than the computer? 'School'... is that an expansion to World of Warcraft or something?
haha.
Great job. I really like the way you're conveying Kabuto. At the same time like Orochimaru and against him.
Caring for the village instead of his personal goals, but not caring for those who have become useless tools.
The whole concept of Kyuubi and Naruto becoming closer together intrigues me. I've been thinking about that, too.
Will using Kyuubi's chakra weaken the seal and let the legendary monster out into the world again? Or will it come to
a clash of wills for control of Naruto's body?
Keep it up!
You mean... there's life.... in places other than the computer? 'School'... is that an expansion to World of Warcraft or something?
haha.
Great job. I really like the way you're conveying Kabuto. At the same time like Orochimaru and against him.
Caring for the village instead of his personal goals, but not caring for those who have become useless tools.
The whole concept of Kyuubi and Naruto becoming closer together intrigues me. I've been thinking about that, too.
Will using Kyuubi's chakra weaken the seal and let the legendary monster out into the world again? Or will it come to
a clash of wills for control of Naruto's body?
Keep it up!
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. You've really got talent. One thing that kinda felt off...
during the Third Exam in the Chuunin exam, you switched to present tense. You might want to watch out tense changing in the future.
You planning on doing any lemon scenes? The way you write, you could put a few in and make it feel right, not forced like most
lemon writers do.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
during the Third Exam in the Chuunin exam, you switched to present tense. You might want to watch out tense changing in the future.
You planning on doing any lemon scenes? The way you write, you could put a few in and make it feel right, not forced like most
lemon writers do.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ARGH! What the heck kabuto is planning! You are making changing side each time. But I like the new chapters!
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March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Congragulations. Thanks to you, I have now read the Best ... NO Greatest FanFic EVER!!!!!! Please keep writing, and update soon. I can't wait!! OMG it's 3:21 in the afternoon and i started reading (from the begining) like a little before 9 this morning. Thankyou soooo much!!! Geee!! You Are AWSOME. So now i go. Thanks for the good writing. and please continue.
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March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excellent work. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very cool. I look forward to the next chapter. ^_^
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March 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
coolsa.
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March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good. The fighting scenes were very well developed. Your writing style was somewhat blunt at the early chapters, specially shen dealing with the characters' emotions, but it has become smoother as the story progressed. I was frankly surprissed the Hinata won in the exams. I was sure victory would be for Sakura. A last detail, Naruto dated Sakura for a while, even if their relationship wasn't the most normal in the world. How come you made it sound in the last chapter as if he didn't have any experience on the matter?