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NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! not a cliffhanger!!!!!!!!!! after writing the most erotic thing I 've read in a whole lot of time, you leave me a cliffie!!! Nyan!!!!!!!!*pulls hair* please update... please... nyan! I love this!

Please, please update as soon as possible. Damn you and your cliffhanger.

that was hawt! is there more to come! if soo i really~ can't wait! ^.^

You should continue. This is interesting. Update soon plz

and the beat goes on. update soon please.

just wow... jeeze need tissue, danm nosebleeds.. btw loved it!!

I really like the plot, but there's some things that could be made for the better.
Oranges usually go bad after three weeks, and the juice is very sticky O_<
And keep in mind that less is more. What really makes a fangirls/boys tummy tingle is those just-enough descriptions. Leave it to their imagination to do most of the work. Some words, such as cock, puckered hole and adonis is more likely to turn the reader off then on. It's a fine line between midnight porno on the TV and a wonderful, hot fanfiction lemon.
Oh, and don't be embarrest when writing lemons, since it's over the internet, you can pretend that it's someone else writing it, not you. Like wering a mask on a theater, it helps you do stuff you normally wouldn't do.

Hope I helped ^____^

...wow.
I mean, wow.
You should really continue this. -Giggles- Poor Sasuke. x3
But it was incredibly hot. Please continue! I want to know what happens next! <3

I loved it!>///< You should add more to it it would make a really interesting story, so please continue it!!

Don't be worried; it was very good. :) And more chapters would deffinately be appreciated. I usually don't read Sasu/Naru, because most authors of this pairing can't write worth beans. Yours on the other hand was...sizzalin'