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for Through the Window

by Jiro

person MeLaiya
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh I so want more, um you are going to update right?!?!?!?!?!?! I hope so I really want to know whats going to happen after this if anything at all.
person Tsukineko9
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god I LOVE this!!!! Continue it please if you can!!! It's wonderfully done!!! ^_____________^
person Juli
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Your first attempt at erotica and it's un-beta'd?! Wow, that's all I can say. You've impressed me beyond words. Your descriptions and word usage were excellent! I enjoyed this so, so much. If you turned this into a chaptered piece, I could guarantee that I'd be here to read it (and comment like crazy)! Great work, and I hope we all get to see more of your wonderful writing. <3

Now, I shall go back to read this a fourth time. :D
person Michiru
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
More please. Soon. *_*;
person Hitomi
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful!!
Write more!
person Michirukoshi
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, wonderful writing, especially for your first erotica! The description was fantastic *__~. I particularly enjoyed the view on the sort of "inner" characters of Sasuke and Naruto. I hope to read more of your writing! ^^
~michi~
person ureihitomi
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hi, i enjoyed your fic. and you should write more about it cos it's ripe for more to happen. it would definitely make a good multi-chapter fic. ^_^
person demonesse
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
uhm. wow! i like. hee. you've definitely put kyuubi's *ahem* animal instincts to good use! heh.
person dancing-neko-chan
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow, this was really great. very good for your first erotica. keep writing, i'd very much like to see more from you. now if you excuse me, i have to go and read it again. ^_^
person ghostninja85
schedule November 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, this was well written. I would really llike to see Naruto use his heightened senses to find out that Sasuke is attracted to him as well. Naruto can put a move on Sasuke and then they can engage in some SasuNaru NaruSasu versatile goodness. (Naruto has a REALLY high stamina.

Update soon! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.