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January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this is really well done,character,dialog and theme.Yes of course you should put Gaara in it.The more Garra the better bbut you are doing a bang up job with Ino.Kudos.
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January 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wee! I really like this story! Keep it up! Please tell me that Ino finds out about Kyuubi... she isn't going to ditch him is she? That'd be so mean! But anyway, keep it up.
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January 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
chapter one review.
i thought these two interacted quite nicely ^_^ (Ino and Naruto)
'if you love somebody, let them free.' hah, sakura should think about this. and while she's at it, move on to someone like.. lee. ^^;;; j/k
poor hinata, naruto is so dense. >.>
i thought these two interacted quite nicely ^_^ (Ino and Naruto)
'if you love somebody, let them free.' hah, sakura should think about this. and while she's at it, move on to someone like.. lee. ^^;;; j/k
poor hinata, naruto is so dense. >.>
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January 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is such a unique and great story! i love it. post the next one soon.
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That is so not nice! I can't beleive you'de leave us hanging in such a cool moment like that.
when I first began reading this story all I could think was not to bad, its actually pretty nice and then bam! you cut it off. I hope you update soon.
As for the headaches I think you should explore more the effect some headaches have, like nausea, dizziness and can cause lights to be really very bright or make you vision all wonky, funny.
It's cool what you have going on with Ino and then Sasuke, I like the oblivious but inlove slowly driving him mad for Naruto love is a cool angle. (you're probably not going for driving him mad kind of love are you?) Still it's a very nice beginning and a slow build is often the better way to go in a story it makes it very obsorbing.
So please, please update soon!
when I first began reading this story all I could think was not to bad, its actually pretty nice and then bam! you cut it off. I hope you update soon.
As for the headaches I think you should explore more the effect some headaches have, like nausea, dizziness and can cause lights to be really very bright or make you vision all wonky, funny.
It's cool what you have going on with Ino and then Sasuke, I like the oblivious but inlove slowly driving him mad for Naruto love is a cool angle. (you're probably not going for driving him mad kind of love are you?) Still it's a very nice beginning and a slow build is often the better way to go in a story it makes it very obsorbing.
So please, please update soon!
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GARGH! Nice, non-annoying Ino is definately refreshing! CAn't wait for more!
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January 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yo! nice story, though i'm not a yaoi reader, anyways, abiyt ino's jutsu in japanese, i think it's called shintenshin no jutsu. you can also find it in either www.narutofan.com or www.narutochuushin.com. well, keep up the good writing, now i'm off to kick some sound nins, ja!
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January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this fic! It's rare to find fics where we find other characters being friends with Naruto, and it's really nice to see. (And we get Sasuke jealous and stuff, which is a plus.) I also like the minor (?) plot thread of Naruto's headaches, I think I might see where it's headed, so I'm curious to see if it's what I thought it was. :)
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January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story so far. It's nice that Naruto has Ino as a friend. It's also fun watching Sasuke be jelaous. I can't wait to find out what's wrong with Naruto. By the way, Ino's techinique in japanese is Shintenshi no jutsu.
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January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Weee, a die-hard SasuNaru and GaaNaru reader enjoyed the first chapter! You're doing a great job at making Ino like a real person and not a guy-obessing maniac. XD