rate_review Reviews

I was literally jumping for joy when I found out you updated. I love this beautifully written story (and the chapters are always very long! ^_^) I got very, VERY suspicious about Mitani especially how the villagers brought him to Ayame’s grandma. I didn’t really think I would be right until I read the last paragraph. At first I was like huh? But then after reading it over and over again. I finally found out what it that thing was, and I kept on banging my head against the desk for being incredibly stupid about not knowing what it was the first time I read it. Man, now I feel all hyper and I can’t wait for the next chapter and see what Ayame would do. Please update ASAP!!!! :)

aaaaaaaaa OMG you are so cruel. Its sasuke, I KNOW IT IS. OH PLEASE LET HIM REMEMBER!!!! OH MAN, YOU DONT UPDATE IN FOREVER AND WHEN YOU DO YOU END IT ON ANOTHER CLIFF HANGER THAT PROBABLY WONT BE UPDATED FOR ANOTHER THOUSAND YEARS!!!! PLEASE UPDATE A.S.A.P. IM BEGGIN YOU PLEEEEEAAAAASSSSEEEEEE!!!!!!

if you don't make another chapter i will find where you live and strangle you
but on a lighter note I LOVE YOUR STORY the kitsune is portrad so well but please don't let sasuke be dead
if he is i'll cry

OH MY GOD I KNEW IT! I was wondering why you put so much effort into what seemed to be a original character! OH NOESSSS!!!!! Okay now that is over, Hello! To be honest I have seen this fiction around for a long time but I always avoided it. Why you ask, because of its epic size! I am glad I choose to read it today but my eyes hurt like a-son-of-bitch! I started around noon and finished almost thirty minutes after midnight. I cry twin waterfall over the sheer heart this fanfiction has! In many ways this fanfiction has reached the limit of what a mere good fanfiction can be and then up and went further. Normally there are few fanfictions that stir such a strong reaction, to be honest I went in to this and expected the usually fair. The relationship while it can get fluffy it seems to be so natural. You have a great grasp of the characters and you used them effectively. None of the characters, except the obivious bad guys, are so one dimensional and each has a clear sense of self. The criticism I wil give you is the tendency for thing to drag a bit. Its nice to play up the suspense and anxiety for the drama but GOD I think you caused my poor heart to pop! Your use of original characters is inspired (mostly the use of Ayame-chan) and they way they are used to further the plot is ingenius. This fiction is very well thought out and unlike some fictions that seem that the author is merely pulling situations out of a hat this fiction seems to have a clear idea of where it is going! NOW PLEASE UPDATE!! That is the meanest cliff hanger since I don't even know what!

Oh man, great chapter. This story flows so much better when written in third person. I decided to read this because it was recced by a friend, but initially I had not bothered to read it at all after the reading a third of the first chapter. Mostly because of the first person view that jumped from Sasuke to Naruto then back into third person for all other characters. Personally I think that's poor writing, but the depth of plot and description salvaged this story really. It was difficult plodding through this fic, but in the end I'm glad I did. It can definitely use a beta and I'm sure after it's been beta'ed it'll be an great read. Some inconsistencies with the manga but they weren't god-when-will-the-butchering-end sort of inconsistencies ^__^

I'm still impressed and look forward to the next chapter.

Dooooooooooooooods! I am soooo glad you finally up'd!! I'm totally lovin this story and it has been months since u up'd last.

anyways, at the end, when u introduced the guy w/ the blindfold and u said he was tan...i totally ignored it. had my suspicions, but ignored it. THEN what was said about him...i was like YES!!!! but once i got to the TBC i was like NOOOO!! lol cuz i wanted more!!

will obachan go w/ ayame? i bet she will ^__^ and the good looking blind boy will tag along as well, ne? hehe omgoddess i am SO looking forward to their reunion!!

poor poor Naruto! i mean, wow. he has been through some serious hell w/ that damn kyuubi. and him tricking him and lying to him. and sakura has surely been a trooper! she's wearin thin day by day, but now that naruto finally fought the demon and won, she can surely relax a bit. but yeah so gotta love the castrate lines *smirks* and now naruto is merging more w/ the kitsune *sigh* u like to bring his spirits down don't u? lol

other than that, a terrific chap! i hope you don't take as long to put the next one out cuz i really really can't wait to see what happens next ^__~

Mata Ja!

O.O I hate you, why did you have to stop there? gaahh! >.< nooo I bet Mitani is Sasuke, despite the fact that he couldn't get a tan in normal circumstances. He's not blind, he's hiding his sharingan! You MUST continue. Naruto and Sasuke MUST be together and live happily ever after! ~Blood

That was a very evil cliffhanger! I really do love this story. Please continue!

I knew it as soon as grandmother spoke about him. xD

So glad to see Naruto in control again and oh, you tear me up with the angst. No, seriously, I cry. I relate to Naruto so much that I had tears. As soon as you had said Mitani didn't know who he was I started tearing up sped-read through the chapter to get to the ending and then AUGH. *wipes eyes*

Nicely written, though.

phoe-chan

Wow. All I can say is just... PLEASE try to update quickly. I read through the last two chapters as soon as I got home from freshman orientation, ^^; even though I'm so tired I could almost literally drop dead. That's how great they were. I'm really looking forward to more, as you've left us with the cliffhanger to end all cliffhangers.

Great work, and I'll be waiting for an update. *wanders off to sleep*