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awwwww!! this was so sweet and nice lol @ the ending. they already have four kids and he'd preggers again lmao.really should have gone family planning..*smirks* great story btw1

Hi! Umm...you're premise is interesting and you've got great potential as a writer. My concrit would be to go through the story and decide on one point of view per chapter or for the entire story. It was a bit frustrating to get used to one POV and not even a paragraph later, have the story switch to another person's POV. I tried to get through the first chapter and couldn't make it past the 5th or 6th POV switch. It disrupted the flow of the story entirely and I couldn't get back into the story and enjoy it. Anyways, I hope you take my criticism as a suggestion and not as an insult (it's not meant to be an insult at all). Cheers.

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So so awesome!!! I loved every bit of this!!! The end was so funny lol and i like the whole jealousy chapters muahahah Jealous Sasu is just effing cute and adorable. Oh and i forgot to say hot!

I love this story so much! It contained so much humor (and good humor to boot), plus a side of hot steamy romance between Naruto and Sasuke, and they had not just one child in the end –but 4 and now soon turning out to be 5! The ending was perfect in the epilogue! And here comes baby number 5 (Sasuke obviously not complaining much for he loves adding more Uchiha’s babies to his growing new clan)! Thank you so much for writing this story and I’ve already fallen in love with your style of writing that I’m going to check out what other stories you have as well! You’ll be hearing from me soon! ^0^

WAHH NICE JOBU!!! *GOOD GUY POSE*

This is without a doubt the first Mpreg SasuNaru fic i actually read to the end in 3 years and had a blast while reading it to boot

Amazing i loved it. it was new, fun, not angst for the firs time in all Mpreg’s history ;p and yum the jealousy i loved it XD

i applause your writing skills kept me entertained through the whole story didn't even stop to pee ;p

thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. Would love to see more of it and how the boys raised the kids

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looli :)

*sighs deeply with satisfaction* That story was awesome. I should have gone to bed 2 hours ago :( I now have to get up in 5 hours, but your story was worth it. A little shaky in the beginning but I really enjoyed the whole story, especially Sasuke's jealousy over the Rain lord. Good job!!

Great story. I really enjoy reading it. Look forward to reading your future works. Until next time, take care, and god bless.

Cute and sweet. Great fic. I really enjoy reading it. Look forward to reading your future works. Until then, take care, and god bless.