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by mehmeh

person macy
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hwaaaaa!!! sooo good!!!! I was literally running out of the house this morning, coz I couldn't stop reading the fic even though I knew that my class was starting in less than an hour and I was not even dressed up for school yet! Sooo...I rushed back home after school to continue reading this ^^ Hehehehe... I love the Kyuubi/Naruto talks...they're so hot, hehehe ^^;; This fic is developing really well!! Very interesting movement, can't wait what happens next now that Naruto's letting kyuubi play the game. I get all excited when Naruto's in seduction mode, it's suuuper hot. XD
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant as usual. I'm Kawaii_kitsune_thief who reviewed previously. I love your story and as soon as I figure out how I'm going to add it to my recommended list.
person MultifacetedTune
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay!!! You updated!!! Sorry that I didn't review for the last chapter -- my life has been so hectic lately that I never have any...ummm...."down time" anymore, if you know what I mean........... (heh......actually, my Mom has been overbearing that last few weeks....erm, months, lol.....and so I have to be careful. She hates it when I do nothing but read on my laptop......therefore, I do "homework". Damn that homework, ne? Just soooo troublesome........) ^___~ Oh, here, I got you something: *gives you a bag of "sugar free, low fat" chocolates* ........I hate those things, sooooooo......... *insert mischevious wink here* *has secretly replaced all of the "fake" (lol) chocolates with real ones* There ya' go!!! Mind games!!! What do you need to feel guily for? .....after all, they -are- low fat......... ^___~ Thanks so much for updating, once again. I can't wait to find out where you take this......as I of right now, I'm completely stumped!!! ^___^ Ja ne!!!

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(P.S. As for my name, I'll try to make a long story short: I have a friend who is.......well, kinda' schitzo (or however you spell it.....heh.....) ^^ She claims to be around 7 or 8 different "people", but I've only ever seem 1......then again, this is the same friend who seriously wants to take over the world, soooo......... ^___^ Back to the point (if there ever really was one........gods, do I need coffee..........) As a joke, I came up with several different "personas" of my own......not seperate people, mind you, but different specific aspects of my existing personality......am I making any sense? Okay, didn't think so....... *shrugs* Anyway, they all have different "colors", etc., but no names, and when I'm sugar high, on a lot of caffine, sleep deprived, etc. (which, surprisingly, doesn't happen as often as many think it would), I tend to lean more towards a certain fragment of my persona, rather than being in "balance". Got it? ...hope so....... now then, as for my name: I do have one main persona who controls the others; she is essentially perfect and everything I am not...... *sigh* In short, as an author, I call her my "muse", and she is the only one with a name: Melody. Therefore....... (just watch, this will suddenly all fall into place.....I think......I hope.............) ^^ ........I have many parts of my personality, or many "facets", and my muse's name is Melody, or a "tune", so there you have it: "MultifacetedTune"!!! *sigh* Thank god that's over........hope it made sense............. oh, and sorry that this was actually longer than the review....... I didn't mean to do that, it's just the way it turned out, so.......yeah. ^^ Let me know if you're completely confused, and I'll try to help......as for right now, though, I'm going to go get some caffine into my system before I make an ever bigger idiot of myself........... ^___~ Ja ne!!!)
person Rika
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love you!
Well, not really...
But I am now your fan, forever more!!
You are number one in my list.

Like you, I absolutely adore Kyuubi.
How can I not...
Anyway..
YOU RULE!!!!!! GO YOU AND PWP STORY
GO YOOOOUUUUU!!!!
*hands you a Kyuubi plushie*
person Gitona
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay.Update!That was an..odd one. XD Loved it.
person jadetiger
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow evil demon....

becoming evil naruto.
this is go good!!
and ya i found a stedy suply of naruto anime so i'm good now.
person ayonoi
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn, I like how your are writing Kyuubi, a really sharp, smart demon, looking for his best interest while stringing Naruto alone. While I really want to see the sex, the innuendo is way excellent, it has been for most of the fic. The last scene was awesome, I very much doubt Sasuke had ever seen that one coming. And the best part is that is Naruto tell him that he wants to fuck him, taking the initiative and being kinda of the alpha male. LOL. Sasuke-kins will not stand for that so I expect some sort of comeback on his part.

Ohh I wonder what he will do with Kakashi's little doll. Hmmmm...I wonder why am I obsessed with Kakashi-sensei?

Excellent update, I love your fic!
person Sekra
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hdjghiufghjijg GUH excuse me while I fwibble over generous KyuuNaru smutty love..

Okay, fwibbling not quite done but I can now form half-cohearant sentences. I love you. Seriously, marry me. At first I wasnt sure if I wanted to read this because I'm sort of completely against weepy-uke Naruto. But I couldnt resist the KyuuNaru.. I really couldnt. And I was happy to find that you actually gave him a backbone. Like guh, I love all demon-manipulative-muwaaha!Naru <3 And I absolutely love the confrontation with Kakashi! And Kyuubi... dont even get me started on how much I love Kyuubi and his molesting ways. If my computer ever gets fixed I'll have to get around to doing that KyuuNaru fanart that I've been hanging to do. Yes, it's 5am and I'm not making any sense.. Cant wait for more! Give me smut!
person gothic_marshmallow
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hahaha i loved the "i want to fuck you in front of old geezer's shrine"! XD hilarious. dude, the sex chapter is next, yeah?? :D

but seriously, you're a very good writer. i love the way you write descriptions and the story's great. dialogue's yummy too. XD so keep it up i love this story. wooooo...
person evil
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Grins* Well, if he won't stay an innocent virgin any longer, then I say, GET THE CAMERA'S OUT! WE NEED SOME PICTURES!! *Sniggers* Well, keep up the fic, damnit!! It's damn good... And at the end, when Naruto tells Sasuke, "I want to fuck you, even in front of the old geezer's grave", that was hilarious!! Hahah, now Sasuke's gonna have that line stuck in his head... *Waggles eyebrows* Good for him though... ^___^ Update soon, ne? ^^