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by mehmeh

person Ezj
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^_^... Since I don't have anything inteigent to say more
than... cool story... thats all I say. -_-;;
person akuma_river
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
coolsa.
person MultifacetedTune
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O ...Duuuuude, that was awesome!!! Narute is soooooo kewl when he's pissed!!! Heh...poor Kakashi...or maybe he's lucky........ ^___~ I'm glad that you have chosen to portray Naru-kun this way...sick and tired of the unfair treatment and finally deciding to do something about it, I mean. Makes him appear very realistic.....and with Kyuubi thrown into the mix, deep as well! ^___^ I can't wait to find out what happens!!! Here: *gives you a pen, paper, and chocolates* ...the chocolates are to thank you for updating and to help inspire your creativity.........Ahh, the power of chocolate!!! (And yes, that was corney as hell....sorry.....chocolate depraved....) ^___~ Keep up the good work, and update ASAP!!! Oh, and I'm glad you like my screen-name......there's a story behind it, if you're interested..... *shrugs* Ja ne!!!
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow. you're planning to have me review every chapter for this fic, aren't you? *looks around suspiciously* well, it's working and let me tell you. after reading this, there is no way in hell that i am gonna get any sleep now. a naruto acting slutty and hitting on a unsuspecting kakashi will do that to ya. i am a big sucker for kakanaru..... get it..... SUCKER *waggles her eyebrows* oh yeah, you get it ^__^ *rereads the chapter* HAH!! the kyuubi broke sakura's leg. that sexy beast. i cant wait to see what else he's got planned. thanks for the kiss, btw. *gives you some pain meds for your lips* dont worry, you'll have that kyuubi eating right out of your palm in no time. meanwhile, make sure you sneak in some kyuubiXnaru scenes in the next chapter. so until then, ja ne!

“I promise I’ll swallow.” ROTFL!!!!


person Ayako
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The more I read of this fic, the more I realize how much I like Naruto as a slutty!uke. XD It's intriguing...And I do like seeing him question Kakashi that way (well, I didn't think about the blowjob thing XD) because yeah, I've always wanted to know what kind of response Kakashi would give. Because honestly, Naruto's right. Kakashi knows a lot of techniques. He should be able to teach his students something regardless of whether or not they have the Sharingan.

What a lovely, albeit disturbing fic. *_*
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god! This story is soooooogood! I love the smutness and how Naruto acts! Sasuke should call him cum slut! lol I can't wait until next chapter! ^o^v
person Yami-hikari
schedule February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I did enjoy it VERY much. I love your Kyuubi/Naruto bits :)
person Kirsch
schedule February 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*thinks* It's so difficult for me to think about what to write, so I'll just say some random stuff that pops to mind -
sadistic-bastard-Sasuke is very sexy...!! Yeah, forget the sappy lovelove 'i love you sasuke, take me now' shite... sadistic is good... ehe~ is it cruel to want the characters I like to be hurt and humiliated...? <(_ _)> But someone mentioned KakaNaru? There's never enough KakaNaru, and you would write it so well I think. And was the mention of Shikamaru a hint to anything? Never enough of that pairing either... *sudden image of Naruto orgy, kagebunshin and all* Uwa~ > <* Have stop thinking these perverted thoughts *Naruto looking cute with cum stuck in his eyelashes* Maybe Naruto will need to seek out his pervert teacher for further lessons? *hopeful eyelash-batting* lol, I'm just babbling now, ignore me and please keep writing more terribly cruel stories of youth!
schedule February 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
glad ya are happy. so write me more then? onegai?
person Ryuukotsusei
schedule February 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! I can just imagine Naru-chan sucking Sasuke OFF! The
mental
image! And I am about to do a multi-chapter smut fic between Sasu+Naru too! Hmm, I wonder if Naruto will let our dear kitsune Kyuubi take over fully when he has Sasuk any time. And as for Kakashi, I think it would be fun to have him... 'teach' Naruto and Sasuke how to do those naughty things. And, unlike Kyuubi, I'm sure he'd love 'teaching' them physically! That would be so much fun! And he is a little perverted!

How mwny yaoi fics have you done? For someone just getting into yaoi you sure are doing well! Keep it up you wonderful hentai you!