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by mehmeh

schedule January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg, omg, i think i'm going to hyperventilate now...argh, agony, i can't breathe! the blood is rushing to my head. a major nosebleed alert! ack, goodness. this is is fabulously hot or what! i love your fic to bits. REALLY! I even have your story added to my Recommended Section. And be very honoured, you are one of the two writers whose story i acknowledged for! well done. before i go, may i ask for a request? that is to update soon!!! XD
person Ryuukotsusei
schedule January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was soooooo hot and... YUMMY! O_o Yeah, I know, weird choice of words! For someone who hasn't written in 2 years (I read some of the other responses to other reviewers) you are doing VERY WELL! And I know just what you mean about looking back on past fics and telling yourself "God, what was I thinking?" HA!

Anyway, you seem to be good with sex scenes ao I can't wait to see what you can REALLY do! Such skill An I also can't wait to see Naruto "bowing to Sasuke" and Kakashi's reaction when he fins out - if he finds out! Out of a 10 I give you a 12!

You go girl!
person gothic_marshmallow
schedule January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg... so hot...!! *nosebleeds* kekeke, just what i needed! go naruto, go, get that sasuke! make him beg for you!! omg i hope the story gets to that point XD an uke sasuke is a good sasuke!

and on the whole pairing thing, i think it would be a sasunarusasu... since they're both dominating. :D yay! keep going, you rock! XD
person Yami-hikari
schedule January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eeep! More, please more! I'm really loving this fic! I really like the Kyuubi/Naruto bits, I've never read any before, but it really seems to work... plus jealous Sasuke is a wonderful thing to behold.
person Lady
schedule January 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Shit that was hot. Probably shouldn't be reading this at work, heh heh*crosses legs* I'm definitely looking forward to more! Please oh please tell me Sassy will give Naruto a spanking in the future and dress him up in something slutty*big, pleading eyes*
person dragonkitty
schedule January 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well I must say that was some chapter. I love how you did the sneaky Naruto, but you didn't hint at it to the readers.
For a while I thought that Naruto forgot to seduce Sasuke. And speaking of Sasuke o.o....<< well lets just say.........................*silence*
person Rainbird
schedule January 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I like how that turned out. Naruto did well ^___^ Keep writing!
person Vampia Zee
schedule January 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eek! Anouther wonderful chapter! I hope it wasn't me who made your head explode with wheather this is SasuNaru or narusasu. SO SORRY! ;__; Forgive-ness?

This chapter was muchly hot. Anybody could fall for a dirty Naruto. *sits there re-imagining Naruto licking Sasuke's hand* hehehehe *melts* But was that really Naruto? I mean the whole leer and stuff...had me thinking Kyuubi o__o I will find out inthe next chapter!

*duck tapes self to your back untill then*
person just me
schedule January 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow...its so so cool please update soon...i wanna know what happens with Naruto and Sasuke
person silverlook
schedule January 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love the way this story is going-the sasu master deel. let Naruto play dominance with Sasuke for more 2-3 chapters (SasuNaru !! ^^ !! )
You use the perffect amont of angest (or is it wirdnes?? ) just dont make it too angsty plz!
All in all, I love this story (make a good end?...plz?...o.o )