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by Saro

person Anon
schedule July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nice
person Anon
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice
person RI100014
schedule November 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was very good. I thought you captured the tone of her first time very well. You entered her mind exceptionally, getting her feminine quirks and awkweirdness as good as I've seen. I would not say this was "HOT" as much as real, sticky and arrousing. Its not a fantasy as much as a very well depicted alternative reality...or hell a reality that just hasn't been explored. Very nice job, once again. Keep up the good work.
person blisblop
schedule February 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Fists punch air,a roar is heard"yeeeeeaaaahhh".That was so cute,sweetandreal.I enjoyed it emmencely(hope I spelt that right}So cool.
A nd she sure said the right thing too.Yup, liked it.
schedule February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Omigod, that effing rocked! I just... wow! I mean, I thought at first that naruino would be a stupid idea, but the idea behind it was so well-thought-out and nicely-written and... completely hot! Dammit, I want my first time to be like that! ::feeling virginal:: Thanks for the great fic!!!
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Naruto/Ino! w00t! Granted, not as romantic as I would've liked, but what ever. Still, tis teh awesomeness
person Natakamani
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice.... You made this realistic without making it entirely unappetizing *remembers her first time* When I first saw the pairing I thought it would be odd, but this was surprisingly good... Congrats, it takes a good writer to pull that off. I can see this standing alone, or being a multichaptered peice too... either way is good with me, just write more! You are quickly becoming one of my fav writers!!! Write more!

Much luv,
Natakamani
person Alvida
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was very interesting. I liked how analytical Ino was and how she had made a conscious decision for Naruto to be her first after mentally trying out the availables. That it wasn't particularly about love or even lust but accomplishing the mission (First Time) is very appropriate for a ninja.

I guess Naruto doesn't feel used so that's OK.
person tsukashi
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh very well written. The nervousness and awkward moments reminded me of my first time. I rather liked this pairing.
person black
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
While I thought it was odd to just throw em in that situation, it worked out nice. Everything that happened seem really real. She wasn't screaming in passion, and Naruto wasn't this weirdo who seemed to know how to do everything. Was this a one-shot? It is very nice and I wouldn't mind reading more. Even if this was one of those "one night stands".