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Oh my gosh... so freaking cute!! My favorite scene in these past couple of chapters had to be after the cake thing, when Neji asked Naruto out and held his hand. So adorable! One thing I've noticed though, is that you have quite a few typos and errors and such in this fic... like 'through' instead of 'thru' and and not putting a period after quotes (like Sasuke said, "blah blah." instead of Sasuke said, "blah blah") I'm sure a beta reader would fix that up just fine! It's just a little out of place considering how amazing everything else is: your writing, your story, everything. Gaara is even more of a hipster than Haku! That boy is a trendsetter :)

I don't know where you're really going with the story at this point, but I'm sure I'll love it! :) I'm glad you made Sasuke more likeable in this chapter! (7) And Naruto's REALLY touchy-feely, isn't he?? *laughs* He can't keep his hands off people! I love that, so cute ;)

So I'm only on the second chapter and here are some of my random thoughts on this fic: I really like it! I mean, usually these high school AU's are kind of stupid and have Naruto as the Ultimate Uke, and Sasuke as the hot, super rich perfect guy that everyone wants, and everyone is just perfect and hot and the most wanted guys at their school. It makes them so irritating to read about. I'm glad that you gave the characters some flaws! Sasuke sort of has those annoying traits, though. Poor Naruto! I can't believe he was beaten up by Sasuke so much. Like someone else said, it's pretty interesting how you made him the antagonist. I love how you characterized Naruto, it's really unique! No dumb, whiny, girly princess Naruto! :D An artist? So cool! Haha, Haku is such a hipster. ;) And I like how you describe the clothes. I don't know why, I just love it when authors describe the clothes the characters are wearing. The only complaint I have is the Japanese in the dialogue-- you have English translations next to them, so I think it'd be okay if you just went with the English. Plus, it's been established that this story takes place in Boston, so I think they wouldn't be speaking Japanese anyway? Keep up the good work! I ADORE NejiNaru! At the same time, I think it would be seriously awesome as well if you put a little SasuNaru in there as well, like competition between Neji and Sasuke, and Sasuke feeling really bad about bullying Naruto. That would make the story really interesting! But like I said, I'm only on the second chapter so I don't know if this story is complete yet or what's going to happen in the next 5 chps. Bye!

Ahh! I'm really starting to love this fic! (on chp. 3 right now) So far, even thought I'm the biggest SasuNaru fangirl ever, I'd REALLY REALLY like to see this end up in NejiNaru. Otherwise I might cry. :( Man, I still have to say that I simply ADORE how you made Naruto! He's just so AWESOME as an artist! Haku is still so cute-- haha, he's so STYLISH (and gay) and Shikamaru is loveable in his own way, like in the series. I still don't really feel Sasuke, now that it's been established that he's super popular as well as rich and handsome, but I'm sure you can make me love him too! :D I love these chapters. And one more, perhaps the most important thing: I am so, so glad that you updated recently. It's always wonderful, long fics like these that I get HOOKED on and check the last update, only to see that it was sometime two years ago and that I may never get to see the conclusion. Ahh that'd make me cry with sad tears :(

Oh... Where to start? Um, well lets say, that this fic reminds me my own life as a teenager.
It's still similar to my way of perceiving the world, in most parts. And your Naruto has very similar tastes to mine, from music to literature.
But besides that it's just a damn good piece of writing, just f...ing good, really.
Somehow I can't find words to express my admiration. Usually I can but this...This is just too personal, I guess, to post it for everybody out there.
So in short - it's simply a masterpiece to me.
And it reminds me of Ann Rice heavily(Naruto/Louis, Sasuke/Lestat, Itachi/Armand?? Neeh too far-fetched :)
Your characters are so believable, so realistic, so true....
Anyway, I adore this fic of yours and I just can't wait to see the next chapter. Remarkable work.
And update ASAP!
P.S.Mail me if you feel like talking.

I took a chance and read this because the title attracted me. I love the way that you have written it. I love the dynamics in all the relationships. Everything is aesthetically described full of rich detail that I can very much picture in my head. I am thoroughly enjoying this fic and anticipate the next chapter. The story work has enabled me to ignore the small errors you have and just enjoy the vibrant dialogue. Thank you for such a tantalizing read.

aaarrrgghhh, an update, never saw that one comming, i loooove u!!!

Jus to let you know, this is one of my all-time faves here at AFF.net. I love this story. You write such lovely long chapters that I always hope will never end. Ever. I love how you make relationships seem realistic between members and I love how you detail their clothing, like Gaara. Because of this story, I'm a huge NejiNaru fan and the way this story's going (possibly bending towards SasuNaru?) I'm actually panicking. I love how it's written but thinking of Neji and Naruto not together is making me wanna cry. I don't care how it ends up, because you write so well, but I just had to let you know that you inspired me. Thanks so much!

Wow. I have to say that your story has really captured my attention. I absolutly LOVE this story. First off I love the pairing. It is so hard to find this pairing. I have to say I am torn between wanting Naruto with Neji or with Sasuke. They are both sinfully good looking eye-candy. I hope you update soon because I am really hooked on this story. I would recommand a story on fanfiction.net intitled "Chasing Naruto" If it is at all possible, could you please send me an e-mail when you update this wonderful story? I am going crazy for the next chapter! =p

Wishing you the best of luck,

rAiNwAtEr

this story has me absolutely rivoted!!!
your characterizations are delightfully interesting and deep, and the boyz' intereractions with each other are volitile and sexy.
(i was quite pleased you did a sasunaru angle, as the way he was acting towards naruto practically screamed it in the 'i pick on you cuz i like you' schoolboy mentality.)

i hope to god this is an active story, and that you will continue to update.

thank you for writing this, i have greatly enjoyed reading! ;)