rate_review Reviews

hello there, while i'm only halfway through the chapters you've posted, I really like the story. There are a few grammatical errors I hope you don't mind me pointing out. You're confusing "your and "you're" in some of your sentences. See if you read the sentence using "you are" and then you'll know to use the "you're". I also noticed a mix-up of "then" and "than." despite not really being able to help you tell the two apart, I can only say "then" is an adverb. x_x;

Anyway, I shall continue with this story. Great job.

Annnnnd back again for another review. I'm getting this dreading feeling that Neji might be up to something or something's going to happen... there has to be a transition from Naruto going from Neji to Sasuke. I suppose I'll just have to wait and see what you come up with. You asked for a beta and if no one else perks up, I'd be glad to offer but I'll admit, my grammar is lacking in areas. Either way, I look forward to more of your writings and I hope you get your computer priveleges back soon.

Phoe-chan

And it might be wise to leave your email address, stupid. -_-

Ah, I love this story.
I love how you gave these characters individual personalities that are not that far
from their cannon counter parts. The bits about Naruto being artistic are wonderful
and I love a sense that I get from reading your descriptions of what is happening.
Personlly, I dont see the need for a beta. Youre only trouble here and there is the wrong letter
on a word and letters in words that need to be rearranged.
Ie. Form from, If, Is, stuff like that.
I cant wait to read that next chapter.

wow.... that's deep. Thinking about majoring in Phsycology once in college? Keep up the excellent writing.

I absolutely loved your explanation of the title for you fic -- very creative!!! I've been wondering about that for a while now, but never got around to asking, lol. ^___^ Also, I'd like to volunteer to be your "beta-reader". I'm not a "member" of this particular site (yet...), but I beta several of my friend's fics and I'd love to help you out. Sometimes it's nice to be able to get a second opinion about things, or ask a question about a difficult concept/etc, you know? That, and I swear that "spell-checker" has a personal vendetta agains all aspiring young authors -- no matter how many time I check over my own work, I always tend to look over a few simple words that have mysteriously "changed" without my knowledge....... (I'm serious, I think that stupid thing does it when you're not looking -- like right before you print the darn thing, or something like that!) ^___~ Anywho, having a "fresh mind" look over your work really does help (trust me, I know) so just think about my offer and let me know, k? Oh, and if you choose someone else, I completely understand! Just offering....... ^___~ Keep up the good work -- I can't wait for the update!!! Ja ne!!!

Another great chapter! I can't wait to read the rest. I hope Naruto and Neji relationship don't get destroy because Naurto has some feelings for Sasuke. This story should be just Naruto and Neji.

all i have to say is ...Cuuuuute~~!!

good work and it had me smiling throughout the whole thing ^-^ i'm looking forward to your updates!

Oh my god! More NejiNaru and SasuNaru action!! This is too much! And I love it!!!!!!! I love how Gaara is all silent yet cool while Hinata is still her little cute self!! *claps* you're really a great author! I will soon learn how to fav stories! ven of it haves to kill me!! ^o^/

I really really like this fic! Until now I was die hard Sas/Nar, but now I am shifting my view. Only for this fic though! Is it going to remain Nei/Nar or are you going to throw us for a loop. I do feel bad for Sas, but he is being kind of bad! I enjoy good long chapters, I really get irritated when someone updates with a short nothing chap. You are an excellent writer and I am looking forward to more of the same. I must say, I put off starting this one for a while because of the title and summary, but you have more than caught my interest. It is something new, and believe me there is plenty of the same old stuff out there, so this is refreshing. Thanks for sharing and keep up the updates.