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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So... I was reading this on FF.net... and this is the first fic I've actually come to AdultFF.net for EVER. I really like it... and the first couple chapters being random was fine because it was fun. You write amazingly... I'm blown away by how you seem to have everyone moving along with eachother... One thing isn't dealt with at once, more like, everyone tries to work on it at the same time. It's really life like. Please don't tell me that Neji is gonna hurt Sasuke... and what's with Itachi? He's a crazy mofo that's fo sho. lol. I also really love your Gaara. He's amazing. And I love his clothes. Honestly... I can't imagine half of the on ANYONE... but he makes them work. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was truely well writen, I was hanging off every word, I cant wait to read more. I actualy squealed when Gaara kissed Naruto..-fangirl omfg DX- And i was amazing at how well writen it was, i trule got lost in the story, i laughed, i almost cried and i just loved it.
Please please please pleeaaaassee dont hook Naruto up with Sasuke >.> he is scary and creeps me out D:
And LOL Jthm referance YAY. Oh and another thing, i dont know if its just my computer or what but the last chapter was so confusing with all the strange little commers and things D:
Please please please pleeaaaassee dont hook Naruto up with Sasuke >.> he is scary and creeps me out D:
And LOL Jthm referance YAY. Oh and another thing, i dont know if its just my computer or what but the last chapter was so confusing with all the strange little commers and things D:
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February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I read most of this fic ages ago, but i loved it so much, that i re-read the entire thing, plus the new stuff i hadn't read. this has got to be one of my favorite and the most well written fic i've ever read. the story is amazing, intense characters - lots of story and complexity, but it all fits together and works brilliantly. i love how you write all the characters. Naruto's realtionship with Sasuke is crazy, but i wouldn't have it any other way. everyone is very true to their characters. i don't have the proper words to describe how much i love this fic, so i'll just give you my eternal love and wait patiently for new chapters ^_^
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February 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter. Sasuke is slowly going insane I think. Naruto is so much better off with Neji.
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February 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
When you do add to this, do you think that you could send me an email with the web address to let me know? the email is PotionsPet@tidni.com
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February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting, I'm surprised I haven't found this jewel before this as NejiNaru is one of my OTPs. :D I like what you have written so far and I am glad that you didn't make their relationship an extra smooth one. It's a little rockier than most, but in the same light very realistic for Naruto. Please keep up the great work and I hope you update soon. *hugs* Ja ne.
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February 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very very good. I stayed up all night reading and then dove back in again after I finally took a nap. I really hope you will have more for us soon.
Thanks,
Drivven
Thanks,
Drivven
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February 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow.
It took me 4.5 hours to read the fourteen chapters. I mention that because I can usually read fourteen chapters of a fanfic, even long chapters, in under two hours. That's not a boast; it's commentary on fanfiction in general, which can't help but be formulaic. Having said that, I could call your story formulaic as well, but not for the same, garden-variety reasons, which explains why it took me 4.5 hours to read the fourteen chapters. Your style of writing forces the reader to linger on the connection between each word of text and the one that follows. You use them, with consummate skill, to weave your story.
I could see everything happening in my mind, like I was there in every scene. This was extremely angsty, too, which I don't normally go for. It was high school AU, for corn's sake, but didn't diminish the appeal of the story in any way. I want you to know four things:
1. You write your bonds of friendship well. I was thinking that you might have had the experience of a friendship or two like that to draw from; if that is the case then you are fortunate.
2. I love that Sasuke's character could easily have been Neji's and that Neji's character could easily have been Sasuke's. There are compelling arguments for both in this story.
3. I am rooting for NejiNaru's happiness.
4. I give you bonus points for adding Shino as a character to your story. I love Shino.
I think I'm rambling now but the point I need to make is that you have, in my humble estimation, written a masterpiece.
It took me 4.5 hours to read the fourteen chapters. I mention that because I can usually read fourteen chapters of a fanfic, even long chapters, in under two hours. That's not a boast; it's commentary on fanfiction in general, which can't help but be formulaic. Having said that, I could call your story formulaic as well, but not for the same, garden-variety reasons, which explains why it took me 4.5 hours to read the fourteen chapters. Your style of writing forces the reader to linger on the connection between each word of text and the one that follows. You use them, with consummate skill, to weave your story.
I could see everything happening in my mind, like I was there in every scene. This was extremely angsty, too, which I don't normally go for. It was high school AU, for corn's sake, but didn't diminish the appeal of the story in any way. I want you to know four things:
1. You write your bonds of friendship well. I was thinking that you might have had the experience of a friendship or two like that to draw from; if that is the case then you are fortunate.
2. I love that Sasuke's character could easily have been Neji's and that Neji's character could easily have been Sasuke's. There are compelling arguments for both in this story.
3. I am rooting for NejiNaru's happiness.
4. I give you bonus points for adding Shino as a character to your story. I love Shino.
I think I'm rambling now but the point I need to make is that you have, in my humble estimation, written a masterpiece.
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February 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your fic is very good. I look forward to reading what happens in your next chapter.
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hello Author,
I am a huge fan of yaoi and have started a site archiving all the good yaoi fiction. I am glad to say that your story has made it into the archive. Congratulations on telling a truly moving tale.
About the Archive:
The archive is nothing more than a site which links directly to good stories. I do not claim your story as my own but rather I encourage others to read and review it as it deserves that recognition.
Your story is linked at http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php?showtopic=37. If you would like it to be removed from the archive or are concerned about anything then please send me an email. I will be glad to answer or remove it. Thank you.
Vague
Administrator of the Yaoi Fanfiction Archive (YFA)
http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php
I am a huge fan of yaoi and have started a site archiving all the good yaoi fiction. I am glad to say that your story has made it into the archive. Congratulations on telling a truly moving tale.
About the Archive:
The archive is nothing more than a site which links directly to good stories. I do not claim your story as my own but rather I encourage others to read and review it as it deserves that recognition.
Your story is linked at http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php?showtopic=37. If you would like it to be removed from the archive or are concerned about anything then please send me an email. I will be glad to answer or remove it. Thank you.
Vague
Administrator of the Yaoi Fanfiction Archive (YFA)
http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php