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by onika

schedule June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is good, continue please :)
person mel
schedule December 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like what you've written so far. Please update again soon.
person AnnaBelle
schedule January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'll do it. I'll be your beta reader if you want.
person Kiri
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lee, Gaara, Hinata, and Iruka?!?!?!?!?!!? AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

-calms down-

I am soooo sorry -giggle- that I laughed that hard..but -giggle- that was the best team that was put together...-giggle-
person Ehwinn
schedule July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello!... So what? Where is the next chapter you promise to us? T-T Buhuuu... I hope you will not forget your readers (I like your fanfic very much, and i spent a good time reading it... funny and cute... and really "in characters"!!!)
So I can take the 'nice guy' pose of Gai and tell you: "you're sensass'" Hé hé!!! Pleaaaaase I'm waiting for the next chapter!!!
(and it's a french reviewer who tell you that... See, you even have some fan of a really far foreign country!!! hé hé ^_^ )
person chibi-kaitou
schedule May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm...gaara and hinata pairing? I hope so...I think that pairing. I like the story so far. ^_^
person ghostninja85
schedule May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting story, but you should edit it a bit more. There are plenty of typos in this story e.g. "wether" instead of "whether", "do" for "due" and I'm pretty sure even Kakashi's name was spelled wrong on one occaision. If at all possible, please use a program with a spell check.

Besides that, I like this story. I'm going to read chapter 2 now.
person ghostninja85
schedule May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Actually, I noticed fewer typos in this chapter than the first one.

I like where you're going with this story. Although I don't think that Lee would ever become separated from Gai-sensei, I can see how it fits into your future pairings. As for Gaara, I hope that you show the developing friendship between him and Naruto. They share a connection with each other because of their earlier fight.

Finally, although I don't normally go for KakaIru, I like how you've actually made it plausible in this fic (the main reason why I don't really like it. They hardly ever talk in canon).

Update as soon as you can. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
person Elisa Ardell
schedule April 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh Please write more. I like where this is going!! Keep up the good work!
person akuma_river
schedule March 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good start. Big time au spilt. Love it so far. Give me more chapters. coolsa.