rate_review Reviews

Hello!
Another fine chapter!
However, I must comment on something I've noticed continuously throughout this story.
You are, I'm afraid, inadvertently calling Sasuke a girl. ^^;
Allow me to clarify please!
When you use the term 'brunette' to describe him, you are in fact using the feminine spelling.
The masculin spelling is, 'brunet'. I know it's not much of a big difference, but it makes the whole world! ^^
I know it's a small thing, but you said you wanted reviews that would help you! So I hope that made some kind of difference.
Also, I noticed (I think I said this in my last review too) that you mentioned Sasuke had a job, but you've never once mentioned it again. I was just confused by what happened. Does he still have the job? Or does he simply opt to not go?
It's not an overly good idea to mention something in your writing and then completely disregard it. Or did I simply miss it being mentioned again?
And... I have one last question... The first part of this chapter, before you note, was the THE chapter right? Just checking! ^^
Ne ways,
I would like to know if you'd be able to e-mail me when you update, if that's at all possible and you can drop me an e-mail to if you'd like to comment on my review.
Anyway, it was a great chapter and I can't wait for the next one! ^^ great job!
~Greenie

I LOVED that chapter! I liked it better than your first draft, though that had it's moments, too.
I'm glad you're putting TenTen into it, and I really like how you're doing her character. Are you eventually going to make them a pairing? She's sure got a lot of guts talking to him like that. O_o; I can't remember.. did you bring Shikamaru into this already? I can't wait to see what other people you put into this fic.
I know you like constructive reviews but I honestly can't say there's anything I'd want you to change. It was just that good. Hehe. I wonder who you're going to pair Gaara off with, if everyone ends up being in a couple at the end. But anyways, looking forward to the next chapter!

I agree. Your original draft *was* funny, but the revised version was better for the story line. ::grins:: And I love Ten-Ten's entrance into the plot. Another Great Chapter! Keep up the good work. Ja!

Since I didn't see you go on AIM the whole week I was starting to think you might be dead ;3;
I'm happy you're not D:

See, I wrote a super long review on this, but it didn't get posted, and I'm too lazy to rewrite that again, so I'll just say that, as always, this roxxors.

*sends you cookies and lots of love*

Hey, OMG! I love that scene, the scene Naruto kissed Sasuke while he was sleeping! OMG! Its so romantic!! >