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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love the new chapter! I have to say that Gaara was really close to win. And Naruto's last line made me laugh.
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nooo I can't wait until august! I'm going to hunt you down!!!
Story rox my sox ^.^
Story rox my sox ^.^
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May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Chapter thirteen! I love this fic, have I mentioned that yet?
Okay, so no Neji/Gaara. I understand that; they're not really compatable at all. Still, one does feel sorry for the Hyuuga. Will he get anyone at all, or is he doomed to loneliness forever? It's harder to feel sorry for Gaara, though I love the guy, 'cause he hasn't had nearly as much personification as Neji has. I'm interested to see how it all turns out, and if either of Naruto's other two would-be suitors will wind up with someone special. I can see Neji bowing out gracefully (with time), but Gaara's a little...insane. Oh no, now I want to know what happens next! I've gone and made myself anxious! And you're not coming back until August....It makes me sad. *whimper*
Okay, so no Neji/Gaara. I understand that; they're not really compatable at all. Still, one does feel sorry for the Hyuuga. Will he get anyone at all, or is he doomed to loneliness forever? It's harder to feel sorry for Gaara, though I love the guy, 'cause he hasn't had nearly as much personification as Neji has. I'm interested to see how it all turns out, and if either of Naruto's other two would-be suitors will wind up with someone special. I can see Neji bowing out gracefully (with time), but Gaara's a little...insane. Oh no, now I want to know what happens next! I've gone and made myself anxious! And you're not coming back until August....It makes me sad. *whimper*
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohh, greatness~! And nuuu! Naruto, you must NOT give up on Sasuke~! You are meant to be together~!
Please continue soon, nee~!
Please continue soon, nee~!
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lovely!! loving ur story, please continue with ur update. Im dying to see the loving between them... kakakakkaka~
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May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lol! That's so great but I feel sorry for how Naruto is being toward Sasuke even though they do like each other...but the one that I do really bad for is Sasuke himself. He didn't even give Naruto a kiss while the others did and also Naruto was denying his feelings towards Sasuke...I just hope that they will be together in the end hopefully or even be more open for each others' feelings... As for Neji, it's funny how he had to play juliet despite he was a guy and Tsunade had them by their tails on the stage.lol anyways I can't wait for the update.Later!
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May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaaaahhhhhh, the best sasunaru (with triangle additions, even) au in existence. I guarentee you that XDXDXD
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May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
“I will hunt you both down and kill you in your sleep.”
hahaha! I think whatmakes your fanfic great is you manage to make them sound like the anime. And that's in an AU, 10 years hence, world. The situations you putthem in are hilarious, and the way you describe them are perfect. Continue racking that insane brain of yours! Great story!
hahaha! I think whatmakes your fanfic great is you manage to make them sound like the anime. And that's in an AU, 10 years hence, world. The situations you putthem in are hilarious, and the way you describe them are perfect. Continue racking that insane brain of yours! Great story!
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May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heheheh........A show? heheh.....I think the four of them should go clubbing, and Naruto should wear leather. *smirk*
let's see how fast the ice melts, hmmm?
Love ya! Update!
Kai
P.S. THANK YOU FOR PROOFREADING!!!! TOO MANY FICS ARE RUINED BY BAD SPELLING!!!!
let's see how fast the ice melts, hmmm?
Love ya! Update!
Kai
P.S. THANK YOU FOR PROOFREADING!!!! TOO MANY FICS ARE RUINED BY BAD SPELLING!!!!
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May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have a wonderful writing style. I really enjoy your portrayel of both Naruto and Sasuke. However, you've got way too much going on in your story, and your love triangle/quadrilateral is cliche and unnecessary. The rapport you are building up between Naruto and Sasuke is not too far from sublime as far as fandom characterization goes; it doesn't need the standard throw in Neji/Gaara to create external obstacles. Sure it's what fangirls and guys love, but so is every other love triangle/quadrilateral fic out there --some told better, some told worse than your own.
Meh. I don't want to be insulting or tell you how to write your fic, and you can't change what you've already started, but it looks like this is going to end up just as yet another well written fan work cheapened by reader review addiction with that whole more cliches equal more chapters equal more reviews of "wow this fic is great"... formula. Honestly, it is one of the better reads because again, your writing is lovely... but I think I'll stop now, as again, I'm not trying to tell you how to write your fic, I'm just saying why I've stopped reading it.
I *do* think you are a super-duper Naruto fanfic writer, and I hope that later you'll write other fics that I can read and ideally finish ^_^;;
I'm uber-sorry if this review offends! That isn't the point of it. Recently a lot of writers have been asking for constructive feedback, and as I tend to avoid reviewing fics right away, I felt like I was being a "bad" fanworks reader, since I'm not going to be finishing this fic I figured I should at least give you a review since I have read every chapter up until now. If you aren't one of these writers and you don't want crits like this, then again, please forgive me.
To other readers, this is just my opinion and yet another review... it is not meant to start a debate.
Meh. I don't want to be insulting or tell you how to write your fic, and you can't change what you've already started, but it looks like this is going to end up just as yet another well written fan work cheapened by reader review addiction with that whole more cliches equal more chapters equal more reviews of "wow this fic is great"... formula. Honestly, it is one of the better reads because again, your writing is lovely... but I think I'll stop now, as again, I'm not trying to tell you how to write your fic, I'm just saying why I've stopped reading it.
I *do* think you are a super-duper Naruto fanfic writer, and I hope that later you'll write other fics that I can read and ideally finish ^_^;;
I'm uber-sorry if this review offends! That isn't the point of it. Recently a lot of writers have been asking for constructive feedback, and as I tend to avoid reviewing fics right away, I felt like I was being a "bad" fanworks reader, since I'm not going to be finishing this fic I figured I should at least give you a review since I have read every chapter up until now. If you aren't one of these writers and you don't want crits like this, then again, please forgive me.
To other readers, this is just my opinion and yet another review... it is not meant to start a debate.