rate_review Reviews

Hey first off you said you wanted something along the lines of constructive criticism right? So here goes...I'm more of an artist than a writer, so you're oging to have to bear with me hehehe (btw I talk to bishihuntress - she got me hooked on Yaoi etc, and I think I might do a picture inspired by your story... :) ) Ok - you have very good visuals - I like your choice of words, and the structure of your sentences - reading the story never gets boring...(gosh i hope you update soon!!!)...The one thing that got to me was the part where Naruto talks about going home to see the kids. I know that they're in college and all, but I immediately got the idea that he actually had kids lol...I know you dont want to give the surprise away, but if you could somehow clarify that a bit more (or perhaps I'm just a dumb blonde after all) that would be great...It really started to bother me up until they got to his apt. and there werent any kids...I was like whew! Heh it just distracted me a bit. Otherwise i definitely give your story an A+++! You are a very talented writer.

Lol, Naruto had a fangirl moment. Anyway, I hope you enjoy, and stay tuned. Poor Sasuke's going on the ride of his life. ^_^

I'm really, really enjoying this story. It's just too awesome. ^_^ I can't wait till the next chappie. =)

What an interesting chapter. You really had me fooled when you mentioned kids. I thought that we'd get to see Konohamaru or Inari.

You are evil to Sasuke, but this gives us the perfect opportunity for Sasuke to fall from his horse and have Naruto swoop in and save him... (and finally KISS HIM).

I've already told you this, but I can't wait for it to happen. The suspense is killing me, especially since we readers already know that Naruto likes him.

Update as soon as you can. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

LMAO!!! OMG, that was sooooooo funny!!! I'm a horse person, so I know exactly what you're talking about. *snickers* Poor, poor Sasu-kun....... *evil grin* ^___~ I can't -wait- to find out what happens next!!! Oh, and about that...... you mentioned that you're willing to e-mail people when you update? *gives you puppy dog eyes* Please, do!!! That way, I'll know exactly when you update after your "little trip" to Japan. *sigh* Honestly, I don't know whether to strangle you for "abandoning" us or beg you to take me with you. Or both..... ^^ You lucky duck!!! Do you know Japanese? And is this for school/work, or just for fun? Oh, and promise me that you'll try to keep writing while you're there so that you'll have several chapters to post once you get back, kk? *insert longing look here* I reeeeeally want to visit Japan......and I will, right after I travel Europe and win the lottery. ^___^ Ah, well, it's late and I have a project that I need to be working on, sooooo.......... A always, keep up the good work, and update ASAP!!! ^___^ Ja ne!!!

lol maybe sasuke should have started out with a pony.. lol

First of all, I really like this fic. I think you're writing is really well done and the characters are great. I'm just a tad turned off by how...American Naruto is. I mean, it's obviously understandable considering this is an alternate universe fic taking place in America. But still.... Regardless, I enjoy Kiba's characterization the best, I think. There hasn't been nearly enough of him ^^

Not sure how I feel about Sasuke being scared of horses...that's just so not Sasuke. But I find it hilarious that Naruto is so much bigger than him XD..it's so cute and funny.

I love Horses =d <3 Reading this chapter brought me good memories ^^ Anyways, I can't wait for the next update >:D I wanna see if anything happens to Sasuke ;o <3

Hey! Nice... What a surprise, I'd never thought of horses as the kids. Anyways, hope the best moment between them would come sooner... soon die waiting~~~

lol, that was a great chapter. I never expected Sasuke to be scared of horses, but I guess if clowns are scary, horses can be too. ~Blood