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Awesome story with a really interesting plot....maybe have Neji or Gaara show up at wherever they're going and freak Sasuke out? XP update soon!

I've read 3 times./ WAHAHAH!

Nice truck, very nice. Thank you for including a link to the picture, it's really the little things that make the difference. Naruto teasing Sasuke was funny, but also a little confusing, seems like perhaps he really is just leading the other on. Can't really make a judgement on that until I read more though, so perhaps my saying so is useless...

The Neji thing was HILARIOUS! A sea of flowers, and poor Kiba is allergic to them. Also a good ending for Neji, really makes me wonder what he plans to do to make Naruto notice and want him back. All in all, an awesome update, and I can't wait for the next one! ^.^

Mhh... Great story, love it.
I won't propose any story changes because on the one hand you won't pick them and on the other hand I somewhat like being surprised. Furthermore I cannot really comment on your style, because I'm not a native English speaker.

There are only two little things I was wondering about.
First you address Sasuke as "the brunette" then as "the raven-haired boy". I don't know any UK/US raven but here in good ol' Germany they are pitchblack (never saw a brunette raven).
Second Naruto needs more than half an hour to cook spaghettis? Even if I made a sauce from tomatoes alone I will manage it to eat and do the dishes in half an hour. But perhaps it was cooked with love ;)

So, I hope I was able to make myself understandable. What about an daily update? :D

So long,
Nathaniel

hehe, great chapter! Naruto has all these tricks up his sleeve. Being able to cook... can't wait to see what else he can do.
I love your Sasuke. He's so cute. Hehe.

I like sasuke in this.I am confused why Naruto has chosen sasuke but is playing the field and being quite the tease,this would be sluttish if he was a girl in alot of peoples eyes,I do not believe in sluts (it gets the point across of sexual unethicalness)but it,Naruto's behaviour does strike me as slightly cruel,I hope he stops the games soon and starts playing good ones.He is hiding something ,some activity too so there is a mystery here,perhaps that will explain the less than cool behavior. Thank You.

I like the way you are getting into Naruto a little bit more, as you did not really seem to touch on him that much in the beginning. I am eager to read more, what IS Naruto planning?

Love the cliff hanger at the end too. Man they make you scowl and then check back 5 minutes later they do.
Anyways, I can't think of anything good to critisize. I don't think I even spelled that right. 6 and a half ours of work on my first job is really killing my brain.

Ta ta for now.

Omg.. Love the story.. hoping to read just "more".. muahahha,, you know what I mean... Itz like Im waiting for the best part to come~

(Ch. 9)
That was... cute. Though I admit I really wanted Sasuke to jump Naruto. Or for Naruto to rid Sasuke all day long. XD
But I guess I can wait. For a bit, though. *winks*

Neji's flower-suprise kicked ass. He's such a freaky person. Too bad his hung for someone who's already taken. Yup.^^
But still... he's card was sweet. Gaging sweet. XDDD

Kiba warmed my heart. He's such a sweetie! It's so nice to see him care so deeply for our Naruto-kun. Maybe, some day, Kiba will get to see Naruto's apartment too, ne?^_^

The kids? Konohamaru? I LOVE Konohamaru, so bring him ON!! Yeah!XDD
And that cat-song... oi veey. That was hilarious!!
XDDD


Can't wait for the next!
Until then,
Ja ne~

loving it, loving it. Keep up the good work and update soon.