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and don't listen to huh 'cause they suck i want to see the story

Too many OCs... The summary is fine, and I think that you should go for it, but have the OCs play only a minor part in the story. No offense, but if it becomes OC-centric, I won't read it, no matter how good the OC is. I hope that you won't take this as a flame, it's not that I dislike OCs, it's just that I don't like to read stories that revolve around an original character and not the canon Naruto characters. Anyway, I'll still check it out when if you publish it, because I can't judge the fic when I haven't even seen it, so ganbatte kudasai!

I agree with Bad Luck in that I don't read Naruto Fanfiction to read about Joe bob or any other original character. I want to read about the Naruto characters. And actually post a chapter instead of just a summary. I am tired of people posting stupid crap on this when it is supposed to be used to post stories. OC's are okay, but only in a very minor capacity. You seem to be planning to have them play a big part of your story.

Oi! Did you just acknowledged me as ur lord!?!?!?!?I WIN! Victory is finnally mine! Why in the world did you ask ppl to tell you if you should continue? Its not like them saying anything would have stoped you...crazy bastard. Well I'll get around to typing your story for you eventually.And I'll have it back to you monday?...Ya monday sounds about right. And you know if i procrastinate remember you picked me to beta for you and thts ur own fault....Anyway!!!!My foots asleep, what that has to do with you I'll never know but WOULD YOU STOP BUGGING ME!!!!!Im tring to write! Damn.Well as a spitefull act of vengance this is a all your gonna get from me. lol. Actully i just cant think of more to say than this and....
Uchiha-teme!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Begging for reviews it taken slightly better if you actually write and post a chapter first. Ganbatte.

Why don't you delete this and come back when you have a real story?

sounds interesting enough...i'd check it out if there was anything to check.....o_O
we'll have to see when you start posting it! *wink*

er. no.

I know you're probably new to this whole thing and such, but if you're going to post a story, it would be nice if you saved the summary for the proper place, and used this space the way it should be used, for an actual chapter. No body likes summaries, and if you want our attention, that's not going to cut it. People want to see results, not just what you say you're going to do.

As well... I think you should try a story without original characters. See how you work with the characters that already exist before you try and change it with your own people... A lot of the more mature readers have a habit of staying away from authors that create their own people. It's not that I doubt you can do it effectively, it's just that more often than not, authors have a tendancy to make their characters the main focus of their story, and no one comes to the Naruto section to see some original characters, they come to read about the characters that Kishimoto-sempai has already written about.

I do hope you'll take this as the constructive criticism that it is and not be struck down thinking this is a flame. I'm just trying to help you see what it is that we as readers want. When you learn that, you end up learning how to properly write a story so that it serves the people as well as being what you want. Please e-mail me if you have any concerns or even if it's just to yell at me and defend your point. I will applaud your efforts.

Please keep my concerns in mind when you post the REAL chapter.

Bad Luck

i think that sounds like a pretty cool story. i say go for it! besides, with a little sasunaru action, how could you go wrong?!