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Chap 17 O.D.- Ok.Gotta stop to reveiw right here.You never,ever come on violent,esp try to knock a needle out of someones arm it can break off or cause the person to put in bubbles or shot more then they where going to not to mention ripping veins all to hell..It may work to stop someone from trying drugs,its not gonna stop an addict since most addicts keep doing drugs to aviod pain ,abuse violence,mental and physical..Only the addict themselves can decide to stop.Gai would send someone into convultions screaming and shaking them.How brain dead.A heroin OD is painless,you fall asleep,forever.There is a shot you can give an ODing on heroin,Its called Narcon and it blocks the brain receptors for narcotics ,they go from dead to pissed that you"wasted their shot".You keep giving it every time they go"under"until the narcotic(any drug based on opium ie.Heroin,liquid codine,morphine,methadone ect,yes it works on artificial narcotics too,most needle exchanges that have nurses have Narcon in Canada) is out of their system or they will OD again in 45 minutes.You have 3 minutes to give the Narcon.It sounds like you have him pouring the heroin into the syringe ,it is drawn up from the spoon through a small filter to get any crap out.For future acuracy.Thank you.

Methadone is way more addictive then heroin,its terrible for your liver,the only and I mean only good thing about it is its legal.He would be better off taking reductions in heroin each day.Methadone takes three weeks to get off of a one week habit,heroin only takes five days.He is getting clean heroin too even better.Methadone changes the hormones in women and men.Its brutal.In England and Toronto(also Holland ect) you can get pharmacudical heroin from a docter to get down or even maintain your habit.You can live a full life and have a habit.Its the law that makes it hard not the drug.Americans do not like people to know this but Europe,Canada(tries) and the U.K. treat drugs as a health issue not a legal issue there for most of our citizens are not in jail for health reasons.Canada has a hard time changing its laws cause Americans try to interfer,no news there eh?Methadone was created by the Natzis in World War 2 to make up for the morphine shortage.It was created using P.O.W.s and Jewish prisi nors.It also makes you gain weight and rots your teeth,I mean your teeth break not they get cavities,these are things the establishment will not confirm though doctors will.It makes money for companies and doctors since it is artifical.But if it is all you can get its better than jail.Keep your dose as low as posibble and look after yourself well as you can.

Last three chaps.Great,really tence,really moving and emotional.I can just imagine how happy Sasuke is ,thats wonderful and I am glad you made it realistic and said the reason for the use was still there.Very well done.Shino said all the wrong things.Not one has said how amazing it was he escaped Orochimaru with a habit.Positive reenforcement not swearing and I don't respect you.Who needs that!You made an enemy baka Shino.

But the writing is a tad mediocre. You keep improving though. =) It's awesome to see someone actually benefit from this stuff. I suggest you write a little more on the setting, the procedures... Stuff like that. Just whatever can give the story color. The dialouge isn't that great though. Gai was pretty out there from the start, but the bone-crushing-hug/youthful-spring-lecture combo was a damn funny way to bring his score back up. He really needs more sappy moments. (Besides, he doesn't curse at all in the cannon.) Also... Hm, Sasuke and Naruto are pretty good, especially Sasuke. The kissing scene and the "I can't tell you I love you." scene were fabulous. Good, good job with those. The thing about not being addicted, but missing an escape was also very cool. It conveyed real emotion that we, the general, perverted public, can relate to. ^^ In fact, I think Sasuke is the biggest character in this whole series... Naruto is obviously important, but more to the plot than to anything else. There are some apparent Neji-stirring here and there, but again, he's way too rough. The characterization is alright, but dialouge is messy and doesn't quite fit his character. There are some well-executed "serious moments," but it really goes downhill when someone decides to spaz out. (Except Sasuke, that guy is pure gold.) (So is Naruto's hair.) But, what else? Let's see... Shino. I guess he's always been one of those all-knowing, omnicents, and that works out fine. I just wish he was a little more subdued and that you wouldn't describe his as "the spiky-haired controller of bugs." It's an awful lot to process, and, do I dare say it? A tad corny... Haha, I'm just describing myself, aren't I? Anyway, it doesn't read to smoothly, that's really all. I have to say though, before I stop writing... The emotion/psychological factor is really high up there! Seriously, you convey a lot of the deep pain that comes from rape, drugs, being un/important, and (this one was potrayed rather strangely I admit, but the way Sasuke deals makes up) being tough and alone only to find the people who deserted you... BOSSING YOU AROUND?!?! WHAT THE FUCKING HELL!!! Yeah, that one definetely works, but Neji and Gai's antics do troube and confuse me at times.

Jesus Christ, I wrote a lot. Oh well. I hope you read the whole thing. ^__^ I know I was really... opinionated on this one (I just wrote what I thought.), so if you like the way Gai calls Sasuke a prick or keeping the background bland (maybe to put more focus on the shit that's happening?), then don't mind me. My pennies aren't worth another thought... TT__TT Heh heh, but I think I have to say this... Yeah, I have to say this!

...How's high school?

thank you so much for updating! These last few chapters have been absolutely amazing! I cant tell you how impressed I am with your fic! It's really come a long way! ^_^ I cant wait to read the next chapter!

i always look forward to your updates. i love this story about Sasuke and Naruto. I really like how Neiji is making Sasuke jealous but Naruto is still clueless when it comes to any sexual tension between him and Sasuke and Neiji. It's soooooo emotionally involving. I really like how the emotions come out to play. They are complex and the characters are very complex, this gives them so depth, even though Gai is still weirding me out. I hope to see more of Naruto's friends help Naruto out and make Sasuke more jealous. =) **patiently awaiting the next update**

Woah... I'm kind... like... speechless...
That was like...the sweetest and hottest kiss ever...
Oh, and speechless Sasuke, oooh, sooo cuuute!!
The whole chapter is really great!
It's really wonderful that you depict love, tenderness and pleasure as outstandingly as you did torture, hate and fear.
Your story is simply enticing!
Update ASAP!

Chapter 18 was your best chapter yet! I honestly can't put it in words...I just loved it! *gasp* And you're finally using spell check!! We are so proud of you!! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOONER! UPDATE NOW!

YES!!!! I'M SO HAPPY FOR AN UPDATE!!! I really like this chapter, Sasuke didn't die and he kissed Naruto. He loves him, it's so sweet. I can't wait for the next update of this story. I can't wait til Naruto gets back to Konoha and sees that Iruka isn't dead like he thinks he is(at least I'm assuming he isn't). Either that or he mentions Iruka and somebody tells him that he's alive and he gets so happy that he runs straight back to Konoha so he can see him. Okay that's stupid but whatever, your the one who writes (and I have to say I'm very jealous of you, I wish I could write but I suck). Your grammer getting better, I didn't see any noticeable grammatical errors. And Gai was spelled correctly everytime. Anyways that's pretty much all I can think of to say. Can't wait for your next update for both stories. HURRY HURRY!!!!! Please, so good:D

Nooooo, you can't stop there!!!!!!! More, more, more!!!!!!!
*eagerly awaits the next chapter* =)