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by arora1

person Tech
schedule July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I....I......I think I love you! LOL! J/K. BUt this story is AMAZING. I feel so sorry for Naruto-Chan and Sasuke-Chan! Uh.....drugs are bad...mmmkay?
Keep it Up!!!!
WOO!

~Tech
person moonprincess90
schedule July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, anther great chapter. ^_^. I hope naruto an sasuke get to go back home.
person Leasan
schedule July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow... I mean, wow...
No, seriously no, I love this chapter.
I can't say why exactly, but I simply LOVE it...
I guess it's Sasuke's tenderness and care, and Naruto's complete trust in Sasuke. After all that ordeal it's just so right...
And now that damn Hyuuga took Naruto from him! That SOB!
Please update sooner this time, I just can't wait to read more!! PLEASE!!!!
person therethey\'retheir
schedule July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
mater -> matter shutter -> shudder sense -> since exspeshaly -> especially there -> their to -> too names -> name's... one could go on ad nauseam.

Betas are your friends when homophones aren't.

Overall, your story has been okay, but this chapter was just... ugh.
person Hitomi No Ryu
schedule July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome...can't wait to see Naruto mouth off on Gai's team for saying bad things about Sasuke. UPDATE SOON!! (BTW it's *Gai sensei* not Gui sensi)
person Aww...
schedule July 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was so, extremely sweet. ^__^ And that one line about Sasuke being "his frozen popsicle self..." I actually lol-ed at that one! xD (I've always wanted to use "lol" like that.)
person Aww... #2!
schedule July 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I forgot to add, I'm reviewing chapter 14! (I think. -__-) You know, the popsicle chapter!
person Hitomi No Ryu
schedule July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You know what would lighten up the mood a little? If Naruto and Sasuke end up traveling the countryside with a horse-drawn ramen cart as their way to make money. We really need to mellow down on the angst...the two suffered enough as it is.
person BloodandChocolate
schedule July 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Blood: holy f*k O.O that was one of the best fics I've ever read, and I cried so much when Orochimaru got raped. And nice NaruxSasu lemon btw, ^-~ Orochimaru-bastard better stay dead too. Please continue/update soon!
person germaine(2lazy 2 sign in)
schedule July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
okay, beside for the spelling and grammar mistakes it's a good story...but one thing confuses me to no end....first you said that one of his eyes are ruined....but then you keep saying that he looks with his eyes and not his eye...and what confuses me even more is that if Kyuubi could replace internal organs why didn't he replace the eye?

Oh well, continue soon!

hugs germaine!