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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oi! I really like this story!!! Poor Naru-chan and Sasu-chan. T-T PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
effing awesomness!
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
impressively grim, I hope Naruto will hold out more next time. Poor Naruto tortured like that and Sasuke being drugged I hope he surprises those bastards by not getting hooked on that garbage. Your story is impressive and I can't wait to see what more you have instore for they boys. But I really hope they get out of their minamally scared physically and emotionally so.
And your beta helped out a lot.
And your beta helped out a lot.
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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hate to say bad things to authors because it takes a lot of courage to post your stories online. Unfortunately I must say that, for me, there are so many grammar and spelling errors that it completely ruins the story. I can't even focus on the story for the errors. No offense but maybe you should consider having a different person look over your work that might be able to catch the errors. It would not be that bad of a story were it not for the small mistakes. I suggest that you have a second person look over your work to find them. Goodluck.
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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Only read 2 chapters so far, and I love it! Chapter one was great! The fight was very well described, and I loved how you kept Naruto in character with making him fight on, when most other authors would've let him give up. But it seems to me like chapter 2 was written by a different person. You should consider to let someone beta-read the fic for you, then reupload it, as beta will only make this fic even better. Ah well, time to read part 3! ^__^
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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
to lazy 2 log in... lol NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! poor Naruto my poor poor naruto! and Sasuke too! damn the evil dude! -i cant spell his name- lol please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story update soon *goes off to curse Orochimaru* but good story i like it poor Naruto and Sasuke though *places a curse on Orochimaru and laughs evily*
i hope everything works out for Naruto and Sasuke.
i hope everything works out for Naruto and Sasuke.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so sad! keep up the great work though!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really loved the story but every time i read narusasu (even if it was kyuubi) I just can't handle it..never.. I just thought that demons don't have sex so kyuubi could have been male or female..if sasuke had done that to kyuubi..but plaah..But I see this is part of the plot so only thing I have to say is Keep up the good worg and make me see some sasunaru.. :DD
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March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update! i like the story...even if it is a bit grusome and i really really want Naruto to get better so please update soon!