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for Prize: The Heart of Konoha

by kawaiikitsunethief

person Hitomi
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 2)
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!! You bitch!! No! Why such a mean cliffhanger?!?!
Please, update!! This story is wonderful!

[Enough with the mean cliffhangers. We're already all hooked to your fiction. ^.~]

Until the next [speedy] update,
Ja ne~
<3
person kayoko
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting.

Everything is pretty good in general. The only thing that irks me about this piece is that the facts feel a little ...wrong to me. For example, Itachi is definitely not the leader of Akatsuki and I don't think the Sound village even has a kage. I thought that the title kage is only given to the villages that are powerful and well established. I guess you could say that a few years is enough for Sasuke to develop the village into something more powerful, but would he really? I just imagine him forcing the people in his land into training for his army instead of being a good ruler. So I really don't see how he could make the village prosper.

Thank you.
person lo
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool. your story line is good.
person Kori Nibiki
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
another good chapter. Keep up the great writing. Till next time, Ja!
person wantmoregurl
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more.. more >< please update! please! wanna get to de "action" part
person Anon
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's awesome! One of the few actually good stories on this website. That's really cool you're putting chapters up so quickly.
person Demon
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE!!! THIS IS SO GOOD TO READ!!!
person MultifacetedTune
schedule April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OoOoOoohhhhhhh.........interesting!!! ^___~ Absolutely wonderful idea -- can't wait to find out what happens next!!! (...though I have an idea.......) ^___~ Keep up the good work, and update ASAP, k? Ja ne!!!
person Kori Nibiki
schedule April 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
::nods:: good beginning. Looking forward to more. Ja!
person Hitomi
schedule April 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 1)
*with tears in her eyes* Please continue this story.
Please.