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for Duty

by bean1498

person TobySeer
schedule May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You weren't wrong when you said we would hate this chapter! But you weren't right either. I like it, but to imagine Sasuke gone-- uhhhhhhhh.... THAT SUX!!!

It's like that person you were riding with on the motorcycle just turned away into a different lane... and now you're lost in LA traffic.
Bring back my pink lemonade! Bring it back!!!

Write this new chapter as soon as possible. I will be waiting...
person empyreal
schedule May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm really enjoying this fic. Poor Sasuke, finally has what they've been hoping for and he doesn't even know. Ideally he won't be gone too long, although it would be even more dramatic to have him return to find two infants when he'd only left a wife. And I like how you have Hinata both strong but also soft. Can't wait for more!
person Atropa
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just what I needed before I head for the bed....
I really love this story, sweet and gentle... and now a plot in it all too.... a bad guy/girl....
You have something here... something that I desperate want to see more of so keep up that writing spirit of yours!!
person allyluv17
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omigod!!! you are awesom!!! i love the chapters. especially this one part --> “Does he make out a strategy every time you make love?” she asked snickering. She pulled her legs up and placed her fingertips together like Shikamaru did when he was thinking. “Let me think a minute,” she said in a fake male voice. “Hmm, yes, I think I’ll touch her here, suck on that, and pinch this. If my calculations are correct she should orgasm in five minutes.” i was laughing so hard! it made my day!!! please update more soon.
person TobySeer
schedule May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOw! Never thought that one!!!
Totally worth it!

Please continue it's that strangely good. Like drinking pink lemonade while riding a Harley in black leather...
person momo
schedule May 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so good update soon!
person Midori
schedule April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey!!!

:: knock knock ::

This is good. Why aren't you writing more? :: sad kitten eyes ::

Please write more!
person getre
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update soon!
person joann
schedule April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow..this is really good..update soon please!
person kayoko
schedule April 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
interesting story.

like you said, sasuke's a little too happy-go-lucky imo, but if i think of this as an alternate timeline that skips the whole curse seal and sound incidences..then it's less OOC?

anyhow, it's an interesting piece.

thank you.