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for Teamwork 2

by Askerian

person koyote
schedule June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi
Just read chapter 3 and it all was pretty good except for the last bit with Iruka. It sounds forced when he asks Naruto about the 'heat' thing, especially since at this point in the story having Iruka babble about the why's and how's of Naruto going into heat isn't logical is pretty inconsequential (a.k.a. it's not something that I find myself overly concerned about). I suggest changing it to having Iruka just ask about Sakura.
person nARIA
schedule June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Holy crap! I SUCK!! I'm sorry I haven't reviewed yet!! >_< I've been drooling over this story for the past few months and I just realized I had it on my comp and never reviewed!! OH MY GOD!!

Just wana let you know...this is good stuff! I LURVE the relationship here!! I 'specially like Naruto! ^_^ He's so cute! I normally don't care much for him, but he's perfect for this family! EEEE!!! >u< Naruto's family!! You're keeping with the characters and that's GREAT!! Sasuke is SO not the type to be like "I've seen the error of my ways and now I admit undying love to BOTH of you!" NO WAY!! He's going to angst about it becasue that's what Sasuke does! But you've added a bonus to that, MATURITY!! I LOVE IT!! He's angsting, but still trying to handle it like a mature person! GOOD STUFF! Same with Sakura! I can't beleive anyone would diss your work! This is a masterpiece of NaruSakuSasu happiness!! I want you to continually update, my friend! I can't WAIT!!
schedule June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Asuka, you know i love you ^.^


more updates for the win!
person galerian57
schedule May 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cool story please update soon.
person ShadowLilly
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I can not wait until the next chapter. I adore your writing, you show a very good aptitude into the characters that makes it seem as though the series is continuing within your story. I love this paring, there needs to be more fics made with them all in it.
person oral fixation
schedule January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness, I'm freaking hooked! I love a tasty well written threesome and these three make the perfect 'couple' for me. Fabulous story!
person Kitten
schedule January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is so great. I never really cared for sasuxnaruxsaku, but, I changed my mind.
person lilly
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just read three of your teamwork stories. I love them Please continue and update soon. I can not wait to read more. I love the idea of Naruto/Sakura/Sasuke stories. Please update soon.
person hmmm....
schedule December 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i really wanna know who was bigger.....
person Lady Moon
schedule November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!!!!!!!!!