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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well well...What do you know...Hmmmm..YAMMMMY!!!!!Yep there's no doubt about it : It's Freakin GREAT! CUTE CUTE CUTE
For a first lemon, it's pretty well done (not that i am an expert or anything) I really enjoyed it.
I'm kind of worry about the reaction of Sasuke's fan club when they'll figure out the Uchiha is not into women but more likely into a certain Uzumaki instead. They better not be bitchy OR ELSE!!!!!!LLOOLL (soory couldn't help it..héhé)
Well on that, i'll be waiting for your next chapter...Keep on going!!!^__^
See ya
For a first lemon, it's pretty well done (not that i am an expert or anything) I really enjoyed it.
I'm kind of worry about the reaction of Sasuke's fan club when they'll figure out the Uchiha is not into women but more likely into a certain Uzumaki instead. They better not be bitchy OR ELSE!!!!!!LLOOLL (soory couldn't help it..héhé)
Well on that, i'll be waiting for your next chapter...Keep on going!!!^__^
See ya
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May 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hay man
dude this fan fic is amazin
gosh im so obsessed wid dis man
gosh its like so amazing
wow man
plz plz plz plz plz update soon......
i come ere every day 2 c if its here yet but im disappointed not 2 c it
plz update really soon
plz thnx
n ye keep up the excellent wrk :) ;)
dude this fan fic is amazin
gosh im so obsessed wid dis man
gosh its like so amazing
wow man
plz plz plz plz plz update soon......
i come ere every day 2 c if its here yet but im disappointed not 2 c it
plz update really soon
plz thnx
n ye keep up the excellent wrk :) ;)
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May 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hay man
dude this fan fic is amazin
gosh im so obsessed wid dis man
gosh its like so amazing
wow man
plz plz plz plz plz update soon......
i come ere every day 2 c if its here yet but im disappointed not 2 c it
plz update really soon
plz thnx
n ye keep up the excellent wrk :) ;)
dude this fan fic is amazin
gosh im so obsessed wid dis man
gosh its like so amazing
wow man
plz plz plz plz plz update soon......
i come ere every day 2 c if its here yet but im disappointed not 2 c it
plz update really soon
plz thnx
n ye keep up the excellent wrk :) ;)
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May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well I don't know much about bronchitis but did it have anything to do with Sasuke not being able to feel his fingers too? Please update when you can!
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really, really, really hope that it's just bronchitis.... PLEASE DON'T MAKE SASUKE DIE! Just have Naru-chan take good care of him and have lots of fluff... There are too many deathfics out there... I don't want this one to become one, it's way too great to have an angsty ending (although those are nice too, I just like happy ones better) So nothing worst onegai? I hope Sasuke gets better soon, you can torture him as much as you want as long as he has a happy ending with Naruto in the end....
Anyway, I really like this story. However I think that Sasuke is rather OOC, so I suggest that you don't have him be so... cheerful, for the lack of a better word. He's more of the silent type (that's an understatement) and he would be more likely to give small smiles, nod or shake his head instead of talking etc. But I'm not saying that it's bad, of course. (Hell, I write Sasuke 10x more OOC than you, I don't even know why I'm complaining...) Anyway, I hope you keep this in mind, but if you disagree with me, then feel free to ignore this. What makes this story so nice is the fact it's OOC but somehow still manages to be pleasant and nice to read at the same time. You've done a great job in writing this, and I could imagine everything in my mind. Uppdate soon!
Anyway, I really like this story. However I think that Sasuke is rather OOC, so I suggest that you don't have him be so... cheerful, for the lack of a better word. He's more of the silent type (that's an understatement) and he would be more likely to give small smiles, nod or shake his head instead of talking etc. But I'm not saying that it's bad, of course. (Hell, I write Sasuke 10x more OOC than you, I don't even know why I'm complaining...) Anyway, I hope you keep this in mind, but if you disagree with me, then feel free to ignore this. What makes this story so nice is the fact it's OOC but somehow still manages to be pleasant and nice to read at the same time. You've done a great job in writing this, and I could imagine everything in my mind. Uppdate soon!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi
omg this story is really really cool
i luv it coz its very touchy n grasps the feelings of the characters really well
i luv this fan fic
not many of the fan fics r as gd as this 1 ;)
keep it up dude
n ye...plz update soon
thnx
omg this story is really really cool
i luv it coz its very touchy n grasps the feelings of the characters really well
i luv this fan fic
not many of the fan fics r as gd as this 1 ;)
keep it up dude
n ye...plz update soon
thnx
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HOLY SHIT POOR SASUKE great chapter NOW UPDATE DAMMIT
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May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Gyahhhhhh!!!!!! Bronchitis sucks! My brother was sick with it for more than a month! And the doctors refused to give him antibiotics cause they were being stupid! He finally got rid of it and then it came back again!! I hate bronchitis!!! *gives Sasuke some of her brother's medicine* I hope you feel better soon. This story makes me like Sasuke.....but otherwise, I really really really really hate him. Like really. I'm really scared that you're gonna make Sasuke die 0.o; and usually, I would really want him to, but heck, this isn't good. I like the soft characters you have in this fic, waiiii~ I think I've said that before to you in another review?
You have a great plot, it's original. And you have a nice smooth way of writing, most of the time. Sometimes, it feels like it's really rushed (but I guess it's really not), because you're putting a lot of imagery behind what's going on. Grr, can't explain right now lol
Best of luck in keeping up with ur own standards ;) lol it's okay for a story to be long!! as long as the style stays the same (yours is really good) and as long as the updates are frequent! ;) so take ur time developing the story hehe
You have a great plot, it's original. And you have a nice smooth way of writing, most of the time. Sometimes, it feels like it's really rushed (but I guess it's really not), because you're putting a lot of imagery behind what's going on. Grr, can't explain right now lol
Best of luck in keeping up with ur own standards ;) lol it's okay for a story to be long!! as long as the style stays the same (yours is really good) and as long as the updates are frequent! ;) so take ur time developing the story hehe
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May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, that's quite goos, you know, and at least it isn't something really grave.
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May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aawwwww......... so kawaii!!! ^^ I loved this chapter -- keep up the good work, and update ASAP, kk? ^___^ Ja ne!!!