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August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yup...... your mean TvT poor guys...write the next chap will ya -wink-
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I didn't see anything wrong with the structure of this story, but i'm not really one to judge...as i am just a silly amature. I thought it sounded just fine! ^__^
I didn't notice any mistakes either, but the beginning was a little confusing at first...i couldn't tell who's thoughts were whose until you got into the Hokage and Revenge dreams and such. Over all i think this turned out pretty nice! i was soooo wanting to 'see' a nice little stolen smooch while Naruto was unconcious, but that probably wouldn't have worked...sigh...it's just...that one panel in that chapter!!! When sasuke spits up blood and falls down...it TOTALLY looks like he's gunna kiss him! or maybe i am just a big perv...hmmm...oh well. Keep up the great work! *smoochies* d(^-^)b
I didn't notice any mistakes either, but the beginning was a little confusing at first...i couldn't tell who's thoughts were whose until you got into the Hokage and Revenge dreams and such. Over all i think this turned out pretty nice! i was soooo wanting to 'see' a nice little stolen smooch while Naruto was unconcious, but that probably wouldn't have worked...sigh...it's just...that one panel in that chapter!!! When sasuke spits up blood and falls down...it TOTALLY looks like he's gunna kiss him! or maybe i am just a big perv...hmmm...oh well. Keep up the great work! *smoochies* d(^-^)b
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey cool story keep it up. Elia
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uwaaaa! I've been reading "Progeny" for some time now, and this companion is such a lovely yaoi "bone" to throw we fangirls! I love love love it! Same goes for "Progeny" of course. Now if only Sasuke would stop being such a prat and just tell Naruto how he feels...
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Fucking AWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!! Cute as hell! This was awesome! *fans herself* Yay! It's so blunt! And raw! I love it! It fits really really well even with the current canon! I see it as if it was real!!! Yay again! The image of sasuke masterbating to images of himself as an UKE??? *High five!* Sasuke would make a Great uke! (Of course...Naru/Sasu for life!!!) This doesn't even HAVE to go with "Our Progeny" It works graet even on it's own! OOOO...maybe you could do another one of his emotions as he's trying to leave the village and having to confront the one he loves in battle...AAAAHHH! It makes me get a tooth ache! d(^-^)b
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mwhahaha! I love how you explained Sasuke reading Itcha Itcha Paradise, and finally figuring out he likes Naruto. Tell me there's going to be more!!
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked this very, very much. I like the way that it is a suprise to Sasuke as well as the reader when he suddenly realizes the girl is now Naruto. Bittersweet, which is always a good read. Well done!
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was really good to bad about Itachi coming back in our progeny. but yea this is a good Idea update both soon please
loves arry
loves arry
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hum hum well that is a very good begining ^^!!! I like the idea of sasuke being horny as any teenager can be. And omg!! He's sneaky too. Well Kakashi is quite stupid to let those kind of books in the reach of children naihaha,
Well I really like this!! Hope some day Sasuke will come out of the closet and confront naruto with his fealings, either in this our your other fic.
good continuation.
Well I really like this!! Hope some day Sasuke will come out of the closet and confront naruto with his fealings, either in this our your other fic.
good continuation.
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April 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hot.
I like the way you wrote this. u can feel sasuke trying to restrain himself hehe.
i'm a sucker for fics that shows emotion.
I like the way you wrote this. u can feel sasuke trying to restrain himself hehe.
i'm a sucker for fics that shows emotion.