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for Teamwork - The Night

by Askerian

schedule January 13, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Love it!

person Shatter the Sky Comes Quietly
schedule March 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The formatting for this and several of your other stories went weird. There's some visible java and the paragraphs are all broken up. Can you fix it please?
schedule November 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Et voici donc la nuit avant "Teamwork" !

Hum... j'ai été assez surprise. Je ne m'attendais pas à quelque chose d'aussi... "violent", dans un sens. Je dois être trop romantique ! ^^ Les sentiments entre les personnages m'ont un peu manqué. J'aurais aimé les voir plus apparaitre, même si leur rapport reste aussi "bestial", mais ça vient peut-être du fait que le texte soit en POV Sasuke ? J'aurais aimé plus de paroles, aussi, même pas beaucoup mais juste un peu : l'absence de dialogue m'a un peu gênée. ça fait partie des choses qui ont fait que les sentiments/ce qui lie les personnages, autant amicalement qu'au niveau de leur désir, me sont apparus moins évidents que dans "Teamwork".

Pour autant, j'ai apprécié de lire ce one-shot qui répond à mes interrogations sur cette première scène. Merci, donc ! ^^
schedule December 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just about passed out from blood loss, thank you very much. Jeez that was HHhhoottt! Loved it, absolutely loved it. The way everything they said was implied and there was not much description except for random details that stuck in the mind gave the whole thing a dream like feel, absolutely perfectly executed.
schedule January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, man I can't believe this doesn't have more reviews. I have to admit I was a bit wary of the NaruSasuSaku dynamic since I tend to prefer Naruto in the middle/more of a focus on NaruSaku out of the three but everyone got equal attention and it was completely hot hot hot and I think you did a great job getting Sasuke's perspective down. A+ rating in my book! XD
person Kimra
schedule August 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't know how many times I havwe to read this before I get sick of it, but I suspect the number is either very high or non-existant. I love this story and re-reading it is always fun. :D
person kami-sama
schedule April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This has helped explain what lead to Teamwork for it confused me so.
But good writer you are an impresivly prisice person.
As it has become my "way" to do I shal grade your work!

A+ on fallow up

A+ on story

A on being presice

S on writing

and

B on length.

oveer all you get an *S++*
person Kitanith
schedule January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
And this is why we love you...porny or not :P :)
person lindsei
schedule October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
that story was the biznatch. it was the est ive read so far. you write like the best stories ever. keep up the awesome work. *mwah*
love much,
Lindsei
schedule August 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yeah...this is the ONLY lemon I've ever SAVED, so that I may drool over it at will. I'm serious. I don't normally bother with saving plot-less porn (even if this is from a plot-based story), but this shit it HOT...