rate_review Reviews

Sweet. I love the part where neji dies

Poor Neji, he died right after his encounter with Hinata. Some things to fix might be grammer(spell right?). In the beginning of the fic, you write in the past tense, then switch to the present near the middle and end. Also, if you can try to fix the formatting. its a little hard to read as the sentences run together. Besides that you captured Neji and Hinata's personalities really well, with the angst between them. I would like to see more Hinata/Neji fics.

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how sad... short.. but aww.. haha..