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Um...you do know that you just put up chapter one....again...right?

Hey again! I didn't expect chapters two and three to be added today (yay). I can't wait for chapter 4 and I am enjoying this story very much. I noticed that Neiji mentioned being prepared for their tasks and since Naruto is going to be Sasuke's slave I can't wait to see what he's going to make the 'innocent' blonde do (snickers). Anyway, maybe Sasuke will make him wear a special outfit for the week...something very revealing. I like how you also have Neiji interested in Naruto. Will there be any challenges between Sasuke and Neiji in the future? Don't worry too much about the typos. I'm really feeling this story. It's simple yet good, so keep up the good work 'kay. See yah next chapter!

still interesting chapter. wonder what the tasks are going to be for naruto. poor him,
knowing sasuke, they'll be horrible! welll... back to the grammar and stuff, not to be
mean to hogo-chan, but there were still a bit of mistakes. sasuke was spelled "sauske"
many times and there was a paragraph at teh beginning that ad way too many commas
and one period that was in a middle of a sentence. there were still some letters missing
from some wrods. if you'd like, and if hogo-chan doesn't mind, i'd like to give the beta reading
a try. you can always try to find my story in the author directory and see how i type my stuff.
if you don't like my beta reading, hogo-chan can do the rest. just a try out. =) you can either
reach me at my sn, Spamanella, or my e-mail address should be under my name for this review.
oh yeah, if this is just your style of using "thru" for through, tell me!

It's a good fic. really Wonders what could be the tasks Sasuke would give Naruto. ^-^ Really hope that you will update soon ^-^

Great chapter! I'm lovin' the potential of Sasuke as a leader of a gang. I would really love to read more of this. Just a question...when I clicked chapter two it was the same as chapter one. Did you change something in that chapter to read differently? Anyway, I'll be waiting for updates from you for sure!

hmmm, nice set up you have so far. now we get to see where the story goes in regards to naru. he could be completely innocent and a happy child (prob with famous gang parents) or he could be looking for a job in the gang, having a slightly darker personality, or perhaps he could be dangerously familiar with all the dark happenings of the underworld and work under a famous alias and he could bring much to sasu's organization, much to sasu's surprise (my fav character development i supose). we'll see what happens, lol

update now now now now NOW DAMMIT

I'm so sorry xD I really really need a beta-person @_@ Besides...those are my every day typo's and I don't know how to get rid of it xD!!

oooooh! sounds awesome! Please update fast! I can't wait to see what happens! If you would like a beta, I wouldn't mind helping out! If you're interested, please just email me at hogochan@yahoo.com.

It was good. It's a good story line, but please please please fix the grammar. The spellings are totally taking away from the story. "funs" instead of guns; "derection" instead of direction 0.o; That's just bad spelling (and there's many many more). At times, you've just hit the space bar incorrectly like "ont he" instead of on the. Sorry, but that's just frustrating to read.