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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Everything is aite so far. But you could have been more clear on to what was happening to Sasuke. I was rather confused by the whole thing.
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice fic overall, but don't you think that tsunade was a bit OOC? Naruto was like a little brother to her so why didn't she try to jump the people who took him?, anywayz keep up the good work.
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Again, interesting start, but SHORT. If you need some inspiration I'd say go read.. erm.. (if you haven't already) The Naruto, Tsunade & Shizune Project
-Erm.. Geno Calamari at fanfiction . net Check out his bio for his lemony works. I'd name some more.. But im' not sure if you read Harry Potter. heh.
-Erm.. Geno Calamari at fanfiction . net Check out his bio for his lemony works. I'd name some more.. But im' not sure if you read Harry Potter. heh.
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like it, original concept and ideas, try to develop the new character of Ino (if that helps)
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good action but why write for an adult site if you are not writing adult material?Don't mind me I'm utterly corrupt I hope you find help,i myself am floundering trying to write fic for the ...needs new blood contest,so luck.
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well.. I wont say its bad, but it wouldn't hurt none to be a bit more descriptive on whats happening and such.
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I look forward to seeing where you take this story naruto/ino is my favorite pairing .
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Looking forward to reading more.
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Is this a spin off of "A fox and a shark walk into a bar" from fanfiction.net? I'm liking it, please continue.