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June 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's good, but Sasuke doesn't know about the Kyuubi so he can't really call him that, maybe fox boy or just Naruto.
You got a lot of sentences that are run on sentences all they need is , and ; and it will be fixed.
Keep up the good work, I look forward to the sequel or the continuing of the story; Coolsa.
You got a lot of sentences that are run on sentences all they need is , and ; and it will be fixed.
Keep up the good work, I look forward to the sequel or the continuing of the story; Coolsa.
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June 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad, nope, not bad at all. Your sex scenes arent too shabby either. *wink* wink* Loved it, keep up the good work.
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very kawaii -- I really liked it a lot!!! ^^ Nicely done, and quite a clever idea -- keep up the good work!!!
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
interesting yet very enjoyable loved it