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for Gamble

by NexusW

person MultifacetedTune
schedule September 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I agree, Gamble does sound a lot better. ^^ I can't wait to find out what Naruto has planned....... thanks for the update, and keep up the good work!!!
person Horizont
schedule September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was awsome! ^_^x
I only just finished chapter 7 and I'm still laughing... Sasuke is really cute... not to mention Gaara and Neji. hey, I don't care if Naruto was joking, *I*'m serious when I say I want a 4some...! XD
Well, it's long past midnight, so that has to do for now.
G'night and please update soon! ^^x

~Horizont
person lain
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
::is in tears:: sooooo cruel..... T_T chapter 7..... sooo cruel........ but fucking awsome so far! hurry up with the next chapter! must read the PARTY! ooooooooooooooo
person Sivana
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really loved this chapter. Even though you don't think to much of it, I still love it. <3
Oh and as for Naruto's outfit, I saw this one pic that kinda resembles it.

http://www.interone.jp/~hcyclone/image3/naruto/naru_078.jpg

What do you think? Close to what you had in mind?
person physe
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
w000! Good story! I think that naruto crossdressing really pulled it all together xD The only thing that I don't like about it is that you have some grammar and punctuation mistakes. ^^ If you're looking for a beta, feel free to email moi
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT!!!

Keep up the awesome work, coolsa.
person Esca
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MUST CONTINUE CANT STOP READING
person Trekiael
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love your story. I love the part in the candy shop. I love this part: Well not like, “Oh Naruto, lets pick out new clothes for you, I’d think you’d be positively sexy in pink!” I mean more like, “Get on your knees by the bed so I can screw your bloody brains out and make you feel the best transcending time orgasm you’ve ever had.” I think it's one of the best I've read about how I saw "Sasuke the gay". Yes, Naruto belong to Sasuke, that's for sure! But that doesn't mean a foursome with Gaara and Neji is impossible! Sasuke as the ultimate seme, meaning fucking Neji or Gaara fucking Gaara or Neji fucking Naruto, a good one what. I suppose you would'nt make Gaara and Neji do things together, hum? Sad, it's my second favorite pairing after SasuNaru. I totally agree with Sasuke, Naruto as a woman is so wrong, eurk, bad, no, Naruto as a male with a little kinky outfit (like black leather shorts with black leather thigh high boots with little black leather jacket with black leather collar with a black leather leash) it's ok, not boobs or make up or long hair. I think Naruto could get revenge on Sasuke during the party by giving him a blowjob under the table, mwahahaha. Go Sas', pound him on the mattress! But as Naruto is Naruto, I think he would probably more fuck with Sasuke by riding him, straddeling his waist, like to say, with his twist logic "ha! I may be the uke, but I'm in control here!" Proud even if he has a dick shove up his ass! So Naruto-like. I hope it's not Gaara nor Neji who win him in the end (but after everyting I told, it seem normal I think that, ne?). Your story is good, it's not an angsty one but a funny one, it's good sometimes to have a well done story that make you laugh more than cry. Good luck! Ja ne!
person nicole
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
iread this story befor when it was just three chapter i'm glad you updated i wonder what naruto going to do next plz update soo
person Choister
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG, those little quotes you put at the top are SO. COOL.

And this!
Sasuke is a sour type of guy. He likes sucking on sour keys, sipping on Pepsi, and licking at chocolate ice cream.

I almost cried laughing at that. And the fireman thing.

PS: I want to see Sasuke ravish Naruto all D/S-like, only to have complications!
PSS: More lemony-ness please! I'm here for good kicks. ^ _ ^