rate_review Reviews

Love it, but you may want to consider a beta, you sometimes switch tenses, they could also check punctuation and just help polish it once the gem's been cut. I wouldn't be unwilling if you're interested. I really am enjoying it though; I find the characterization very accurate. Sasuke's actions hold true to his natural cold and aloof personality while maintaining his determined intensity, not so easy to do. However, his various actions toward Naruto convey his feelings toward our foxy blonde in a very realistic manner, because I believe Sasuke would, most likely, be resevered amongst others, especially outsiders (even if he did once work with them) and therefore be more likely to express more intimate affections when in private. Even the kiss makes sense to me, it was most likely derived from two major things, 1) an urge to portray some form of distinctive affection and 2) the desire to convey his dominance and possession. (which is not at all bad, I like it, and had to think he would be dominant and possessive)

Wicked cool, can’t wait to see how it progresses.
~Nacht

Sasuke after Naruto's ass this bad?Ok I will try.Thank you.

i think you've got the characters pretty well nailed down, but you could REALLY use some help with the grammar. keep going though. you've caught my interest.