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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter overall was pretty steady. I have to admit that it was kind of hard reading the violence that Neji potrayed in the previous chapters but, you did noted that Hinata will better later on in the story. Is Hinata going to have a happy ending? One that will solve everything and possible grant her wishes?
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, Chidori! What's up?! I finally got back on, new name, new fics and all the greatness of my OC. lol. I haven't been able to post the fics just yet, as a lot of them still aren't done, except In The Shadows. I got a LeeXTenTen in the making along w/ a Neji/Shika/Kiba. That should turn out great! I gotta read it once I type it up (its on paper) to check for warps and stuff. Keep an eye out for me! I could use reviews from you! ;)
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October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chidorie,
This is Shikas_Shadow from the Sacrifice for Shikamaru story. In case you haven't noticed, MY ACCOUNT HAS BEEN DELETED! I don't know why, but it has been. I don't know if it was done by someone like the owner of AFF or some jerk broke into my account and deleted it, but I don't know what to do! And a few of the chapters were just on AFF, so I gotta rewrite them again! And I had the Shino fight all set too! *pout* Please, e-mail me at the address given so I can talk to you. Thanx!
This is Shikas_Shadow from the Sacrifice for Shikamaru story. In case you haven't noticed, MY ACCOUNT HAS BEEN DELETED! I don't know why, but it has been. I don't know if it was done by someone like the owner of AFF or some jerk broke into my account and deleted it, but I don't know what to do! And a few of the chapters were just on AFF, so I gotta rewrite them again! And I had the Shino fight all set too! *pout* Please, e-mail me at the address given so I can talk to you. Thanx!
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it and I wish that you would update more often. I'm somewhat okay with Neji forcing Hinata to.... do whatever. But, I'm wondering, is Sasuke secretly crushing on Hinata? Because I think it would keep the story progressing if Sasuke confessed to Hinata and Hinata, because she doesn't want to hurt Sasuke's feelings, shyly accept.
Then, with this going on, it will involve not only Neji and the trouble he is having with Tenten and Lee, it will involve Sakura, Ino, and Naruto. And it will be very interesting if such a thing happened. If it did happen, please keep Hinata with Sasuke. There's enough Neji/Hinata lemons as it is, and the Sasuke/Hinata lemon rage is practically noexistent.
When you update, if you have the time, please email me the link to this story. Thank you! ^^
Then, with this going on, it will involve not only Neji and the trouble he is having with Tenten and Lee, it will involve Sakura, Ino, and Naruto. And it will be very interesting if such a thing happened. If it did happen, please keep Hinata with Sasuke. There's enough Neji/Hinata lemons as it is, and the Sasuke/Hinata lemon rage is practically noexistent.
When you update, if you have the time, please email me the link to this story. Thank you! ^^
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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i hope you update soon i like this fic and hope something good will happen to hinata and something very mean happen to neji XD
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September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really great, I'm likeing it a lot. Sadly, it has made me resent Neji-kun, which is hard since he is one of my favorite characters. Oooh how I hope he gets dscovered! Keep writing and PLEASE update soon!
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow! I love this fic i am going to fav this and look forward to the next chapter! its soooo goood
is there a twinge of sasuhina i am sensing? and shinohina?
is there a twinge of sasuhina i am sensing? and shinohina?
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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. The beginning was really, really good. I liked the later chapters as well, but they seemed to get really soft, whereas the darker nature of the first two really intrigued me. I can't wait to read more!
I was thinking that Sakura seems a bit out of character. She seems really mean. I mean I know she's not a saint like Hinata (who honestly could pass for one at times), but she seems like a bit of a bitch. Ahh. Excuse my language! But that is the way I percieved her in this. But that's not too big of a deal.
The last chapter did sort of seem kind of like random fluff, it made me laugh and it was cute, but I'm still a little confused with the whole appearence of Ebisu and all that. I mean I basically understand it, but I'm not sure I get why it's relevant. But then again, being relevant is boring.
Not really. But it can be.
Annnyways. Again, great story, can't wait to read more, blah blah blah. Best of luck<3.
I was thinking that Sakura seems a bit out of character. She seems really mean. I mean I know she's not a saint like Hinata (who honestly could pass for one at times), but she seems like a bit of a bitch. Ahh. Excuse my language! But that is the way I percieved her in this. But that's not too big of a deal.
The last chapter did sort of seem kind of like random fluff, it made me laugh and it was cute, but I'm still a little confused with the whole appearence of Ebisu and all that. I mean I basically understand it, but I'm not sure I get why it's relevant. But then again, being relevant is boring.
Not really. But it can be.
Annnyways. Again, great story, can't wait to read more, blah blah blah. Best of luck<3.
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August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it's really good so far... i can't wait to read the other part!
you're a really good writer!
you're a really good writer!
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August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Omg Sasuke nosebleed! XD I guess he does have a thing for Hinata then. Though how can anyone get a nosebleed from just a so-called indirect kiss? O.o;; This also reminds me of how in the previous chapter, Sasuke stiffled a cough After Hinata put away his underwear, not while she was holding it. What's going on in his mind? XD Anyway, the indirect kiss thing was more funny than gross. Then again, it might be because I've once read what gets exchanged in a kiss: saliva, proteins, a number of bacteria...
Uh... so according to the magazine, you've just made Sasuke to be shy while being a possibly shady boyfriend. Weird. Um... if he's shy though, and since Hinata obviously is too shy to make any advances (not to mention that she's the last one to be interested in Sasuke), how the hell is anything going to happen between the two? Oh well.
Hinata's had perv images of Naruto. :3 That was rather hilarious.
It's a relief to find out that Neji wasn't the one to change her. I'm rather curious though... from the description given, it might be interpreted that Neji looked for and applied medecine in a rather panicked manner, to erase the signs no doubt. But it might also be that he didn't anticipate just how much injuries he's left on her. Does he feel any guilt for it? Even after the first time he kissed her, he did apologize (didn't stop him from starting all over but still...), so does he feel at least a Bit that this is wrong, even as he continues to abuse her? (a bit like how abusive boyfriends and husbands are, they act all guilty afterwards but in the meantime...) And given how sloppily he applied the medecine... did he use the opportunity to touch her more?
Shino is actually a bit creepy in this chapter. Then again, maybe you've always intended him to be like this. For me it seems to be a result of him not speaking out immediately, of hesitating before confronting Hinata. Ah well.
Hinata is about to deliver the notes from her father... *cringes* Even if she's forced to train with Neji, would she at least still be attending school? Otherwise, whose homework is Naruto going to copy? Eh...
Uh... so according to the magazine, you've just made Sasuke to be shy while being a possibly shady boyfriend. Weird. Um... if he's shy though, and since Hinata obviously is too shy to make any advances (not to mention that she's the last one to be interested in Sasuke), how the hell is anything going to happen between the two? Oh well.
Hinata's had perv images of Naruto. :3 That was rather hilarious.
It's a relief to find out that Neji wasn't the one to change her. I'm rather curious though... from the description given, it might be interpreted that Neji looked for and applied medecine in a rather panicked manner, to erase the signs no doubt. But it might also be that he didn't anticipate just how much injuries he's left on her. Does he feel any guilt for it? Even after the first time he kissed her, he did apologize (didn't stop him from starting all over but still...), so does he feel at least a Bit that this is wrong, even as he continues to abuse her? (a bit like how abusive boyfriends and husbands are, they act all guilty afterwards but in the meantime...) And given how sloppily he applied the medecine... did he use the opportunity to touch her more?
Shino is actually a bit creepy in this chapter. Then again, maybe you've always intended him to be like this. For me it seems to be a result of him not speaking out immediately, of hesitating before confronting Hinata. Ah well.
Hinata is about to deliver the notes from her father... *cringes* Even if she's forced to train with Neji, would she at least still be attending school? Otherwise, whose homework is Naruto going to copy? Eh...