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Chapters 3 and 4 were excellent. One thing that was a little off was when Hinata had entered the dark she didn't immediately use her Byakugan to find her way, just seemed a little odd is all. Anyway update often, I love this fic.

This is nice. A peek into a rape victim's mind and it doesn't seem to be contrived. I do not have much experience with this but you seem to be getting the visceral reaction down well.

I like where you are taking this. Neji's twisted desire for her, the lust and concern mixing, it's all well portrayed. I'm very excited to see how you do the upcoming sexual encounters with Neji. He lusts for her body and he wants to have her but he can't. I think I see how he will work around that. Bad Neji. But very sexy.

It's a complex relationship you have spinning, and I hope it pans out ok in the end. I do wish they would be able to comfort each other somehow. He needs her forgiveness more than anything. And her acceptance of his twisted affection. But can Hinata be so giving.. I hope so.

I like the Sasuke interaction as well. Everyone fawns over him but who does he think about? He is quiet and stand-offish, fronting the cool exterior, but what does he feel? Maybe the one person who does not run after him..

He could add another dose of angst as well, or maybe help Hinata with her own. Or maybe Hinata can help him. I would love to see what you do with it.

The Shino interaction works less for me. I don't really feel it. Maybe because I'm a boy. Thinking on it from another perspective shows a little more of the chemistry. But I'll have to see what you do with it.

Anyway, please do continue. You write well and prolifically.

That's some serious angsty plot you got here, well older age makes the fic more makes sense so that's good. Can't wait for the next development. I do hope Neji/Hinata still ends up together (maybe in a better term?). Yeah call me sick but I like those Hyuugacest, well, update soon.

Hey! Thanks for your review! It was nice to have someone's opinion, but I was pleasantly surprised to see it was so positive! Sorry about the small inconsistancy with Shana's injuries. That didn't quite register with me when I was writing. lol. I got to read a bit of your story. (I'll get to read a lot more later. Gotta meet my friends on Guild Wars!). But for as far as I've read, you've got some great description skills. From character's action and reactions to Shino's house, its really great! I can't wait till later when I can read it all! I've leave a review once I get back on AFF. And thanks for the RR!

NOO!! Don't make Hinata belimec!! UPDATE SOON!!

Damn good.

I love Hinata fics and while all of your characters seem a bit over emotional they are teenaged homone bags so there's nothing I can argue. A couple of spelling, grammar errors, nothing a proofreader wouldn't fix though. I'll be recommending this for certain.

I'm a bit worried. Are you gonna torture Hinata much further? It's just I can't enjoy stories that go beyond a certain point, no matter how well written, so I want to know if I should stop reading.

I hope Neji is caught, at the very least, and his skills sealed.

Wow, this story was well done. Written in the style of the manga, yet revealed only enough to keep you interested. Plus making Neji a typical jealous jerk added emotion to the story. Excellent job with this, keep it up.

Enjoyed it. Would like to read more.

Also, would be interesting to see Sasuke's interest furthered. You seemed to be hinting at something there.

I like the Neji use/abuse relationship you're developing. His conflicted concern is a nice touch, too.