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for That Day... I Promised Forever

by marjul21

person Moon_Shadow
schedule December 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You evil person!! How could you leave it as a cliffhanger....well...in my point anyway. I loved it, and they aren't OOC. Which is something people could barely do! Congrats on that, but I loved it. Even thought I think it would make a great story to continue...but it's up to you. Congrats again!
person Kaze
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
There are a few problems with grammar, but the story sounds great so far, and I'll be keeping my eye out for the next chapter!
person macy
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
howaa!!! a oneshot?? Noo!! That was nicely done --- very in character. Hrm...I hope Naruto didn't die ;___; Keee..but it's still nice that they shared a kiss before Naruto headed out. Aww.
person Blisblop
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Decent.Some tenses where messed about stuttering the flow a bit but all in all well done.Great last line,well plotted.I liked Naruto's increase in mind power and seal use,after all thats Ero-sennin's strength so he would teach that to Naruto.Thanks.
person Emily Saeke
schedule July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NOO! DON'T STOP THERE!! This is so good, I don't want it to end!!