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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool! I think the one-sided ItaSasu is a great idea, it would add alot of drama to the plot. I have a question, if Naruto is questioning his sexuality then the next day technically agreeing to a date with Sasuke, does that mean they're together? or maybe im reading this chapter wrong! If I am sorry bout that! Oh! I think who ever is flaming about these author reviews should just stop because it gives people consideration to know that the author is actully reading these comments and not just brushing them off, plus she (srry if wrong gender)takes out her precious time to respond to her reviewers which I think is really fucking awesome! So if you if have a problem with her, take that up with me!
Srry about the whole rant thing right there but it just pisses me off when people gives authors bullshit about nothing. I hope even though that person might say something again that you continue the stroy cause it kick ass!!!!!!!
Can't wait for your update!!!!
Srry about the whole rant thing right there but it just pisses me off when people gives authors bullshit about nothing. I hope even though that person might say something again that you continue the stroy cause it kick ass!!!!!!!
Can't wait for your update!!!!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
"Also, I’ve always been a little confused by the way yaoi fans tend to like one character in a couple to be the seme all the time, and the other to be the uke all the time. That’s not usually how real homosexual relationships work, and so that’s not how Sasuke and Naruto are going to be portrayed in my story. At the moment, I guess you could say that Naruto is acting more “uke-ish”, but that’s only because he’s just discovering his sexuality, while Sasuke accepted his own long ago. That will change. I plan for Sasuke and Naruto’s relationship to be an equal partnership, so I just thought I’d warn you about that now."
OMG YAY!!!! FINALLY someone who agrees! (OK, there are tonnes who agree, but there are sooo many more who don't.) This fic just jumped another ten places higher on my 'favourite fics' list *grin*
"It must not be true about all cars, though, because my cousin has locked me INSIDE mine once, at a gas station."
I think it's only true for the front-seat doors in cars, and the child-minder lock can be activated on the back seats. It may not be true for older models, I guess, but I very much doubt Sasuke's car is anything but the height of fashion *grins* But I think it's some sort of safety regulation that you have to be ably to open the front-seat doors in cars from the inside regardless of whether it's locked or not, in case of an accident...
As for the Itachi call thing, I realize that was your intent, but I feel that in that case Sasuke is probably used to Itachi calling and worrying and should therefore seem more exhasperated and annoyed from the beginning rather than patiently explaining before becoming pissed off. But then, what Sasuke said could have been said in many ways and it could be that I just didn't read it in a way that conveyed said emotions... maybe you could use more adjectives describing how the characters talk / say things? Or course that has it's downsides too, as it interferes a bit with the readers' imagination of how things happen, as we all have our own little films playing in our heads fuelled by your words, but so long as it's only used sparingly I think it might be beneficial. And sometimes it's good to make sure people see things your way - they don't have to agree with what they see, but it gets a point your trying to make across more effectively. If you're trying to make a point, that is...
Oops, I'm rambling.
Another great chapter - saved by the bell, eh Naruto? *grins*
I love how Naruto and Sasuke are on different wavelengths a lot of the time, though they do frequantly overlap. Because relationships are like that, and you always think you're the only one with doubts, worries or possibly heartache when really your partner thinks the very same, and it's all down to communication, and when you do finally communicate and realize what's going on you often feel stupid for worrying about it later. Erm, getting off topic again.
I like how Naruto-the-ever-obnoxious-and-loud-and-you-will-hear-my-opinion-whether-you-want-to-or-not is really very self-conscious and aware of what other people might think, but tends to get caught up in the heat of the moment and forget that he cares until it's too late. Of course public displays of affection, especially when concerning homosexual couples (and especially when you're not even sure you're homo or bisexual or neither) is a HUGE step, especially for someone with frequantly attacked (if not necessarily low) self-esteem, so good call on Naru-chan being hugely nervous about Sasuke's proximity and the thought of kissing him in a public place.
Oh, and as for ItaSasu... I don't usually like it, mainly because everyone always portrays Sasuke as the poor abused UBER-UKE little borther, or else the haunted (by brother and past), addicted (to brother), completely OOC individual with a perverse fixation for his older brother. I've yet to come across a convincing story with said pairing as the main one, and though I don't doubt that there are good ones that make a convincing case for the relationship, there's too much trash that's put me off trying to sift to find it. It's not worth it, and I much prefer NaruSasuNaru anyway, so why bother.
But that aside, I don't object to the idea of one or both brothers having some sort of fixation with the other that could be sexual or possibly some perverse form of love. I don't want to discourage you from writing with hints of ItaSasu (or even blatant ItaSasu) (and you undoubtably will write it whatever I think *grins*) but I think it's a tentative subject that's hard to get right. Good luck with it!!
Neways, great fic, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it!
-Shiin
PS. Can't remember if I already said this last time, but I think it's great that you respond to reviews! It's good for both you as the author as explaining reasons for doing certain things often makes it clearer in your own mind (it does for me at least- not that I've ever written anything I'd consider posting anywhere) and it's good for the reader by as it both helps them to understand the characters and the plot as well giving them assurance that their doubts, critisisms and praises are heard and acknowledged in some way, which is always nice. Yay!
OMG YAY!!!! FINALLY someone who agrees! (OK, there are tonnes who agree, but there are sooo many more who don't.) This fic just jumped another ten places higher on my 'favourite fics' list *grin*
"It must not be true about all cars, though, because my cousin has locked me INSIDE mine once, at a gas station."
I think it's only true for the front-seat doors in cars, and the child-minder lock can be activated on the back seats. It may not be true for older models, I guess, but I very much doubt Sasuke's car is anything but the height of fashion *grins* But I think it's some sort of safety regulation that you have to be ably to open the front-seat doors in cars from the inside regardless of whether it's locked or not, in case of an accident...
As for the Itachi call thing, I realize that was your intent, but I feel that in that case Sasuke is probably used to Itachi calling and worrying and should therefore seem more exhasperated and annoyed from the beginning rather than patiently explaining before becoming pissed off. But then, what Sasuke said could have been said in many ways and it could be that I just didn't read it in a way that conveyed said emotions... maybe you could use more adjectives describing how the characters talk / say things? Or course that has it's downsides too, as it interferes a bit with the readers' imagination of how things happen, as we all have our own little films playing in our heads fuelled by your words, but so long as it's only used sparingly I think it might be beneficial. And sometimes it's good to make sure people see things your way - they don't have to agree with what they see, but it gets a point your trying to make across more effectively. If you're trying to make a point, that is...
Oops, I'm rambling.
Another great chapter - saved by the bell, eh Naruto? *grins*
I love how Naruto and Sasuke are on different wavelengths a lot of the time, though they do frequantly overlap. Because relationships are like that, and you always think you're the only one with doubts, worries or possibly heartache when really your partner thinks the very same, and it's all down to communication, and when you do finally communicate and realize what's going on you often feel stupid for worrying about it later. Erm, getting off topic again.
I like how Naruto-the-ever-obnoxious-and-loud-and-you-will-hear-my-opinion-whether-you-want-to-or-not is really very self-conscious and aware of what other people might think, but tends to get caught up in the heat of the moment and forget that he cares until it's too late. Of course public displays of affection, especially when concerning homosexual couples (and especially when you're not even sure you're homo or bisexual or neither) is a HUGE step, especially for someone with frequantly attacked (if not necessarily low) self-esteem, so good call on Naru-chan being hugely nervous about Sasuke's proximity and the thought of kissing him in a public place.
Oh, and as for ItaSasu... I don't usually like it, mainly because everyone always portrays Sasuke as the poor abused UBER-UKE little borther, or else the haunted (by brother and past), addicted (to brother), completely OOC individual with a perverse fixation for his older brother. I've yet to come across a convincing story with said pairing as the main one, and though I don't doubt that there are good ones that make a convincing case for the relationship, there's too much trash that's put me off trying to sift to find it. It's not worth it, and I much prefer NaruSasuNaru anyway, so why bother.
But that aside, I don't object to the idea of one or both brothers having some sort of fixation with the other that could be sexual or possibly some perverse form of love. I don't want to discourage you from writing with hints of ItaSasu (or even blatant ItaSasu) (and you undoubtably will write it whatever I think *grins*) but I think it's a tentative subject that's hard to get right. Good luck with it!!
Neways, great fic, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it!
-Shiin
PS. Can't remember if I already said this last time, but I think it's great that you respond to reviews! It's good for both you as the author as explaining reasons for doing certain things often makes it clearer in your own mind (it does for me at least- not that I've ever written anything I'd consider posting anywhere) and it's good for the reader by as it both helps them to understand the characters and the plot as well giving them assurance that their doubts, critisisms and praises are heard and acknowledged in some way, which is always nice. Yay!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I have to tell that I don't like very much the prospect of Sasuke being a possible uke, I mean, equal relationship are ok, but a moaning, flushing, arching Sasuke is just, eww. I dully prefer him being like he is now, a real pervert, and Naruto not agreeing with all his pervertness. If you know the story "falling spiral" by Becca Amon, you see the kind of equal relationship I see bearable between them.I love SasuNaru stories with one-sided ItaSasu (more than ItaNaru), even if we love him, we all know Itachi's a sick pervert with one hell of a fucked up relationship with his little brother. In my stories (I never writed them, maybe one day), either Itachi has the hots for his bro or for the human version of Kyuubi, I can't see him wanting someone else. Anyway good luck, oh and don't disontinue your story cause you're kind enought to answer to your dear reviewers and some think it's really difficult to skip them, it's using theirs poor little hands of them! Ja ne!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I was scrolling through the reviews, trying to see if I had reviewed before, but couldn't find my name so "oops!" And wow, over 200 reviews with only 5 chapters. This story has way too many hits for you to even think about stopping.
About the reviews: As you've probably noticed, you won't be able to please everyone here...that's the way it is throughout the entire world. So to get so upset that some reviewers complained about your long reviews and threaten to not continue the story is a little....well, not quite sure what to say, except don't be so sensitive. Continue doing what you want to do and ignore the things you don't like. And if you didn't expect some criticism, then you shouldn't post. I think most of them were mostly complaining because the chapter was over--they wanted to read more of your story. Needless to say, I was upset when I read your note at the beginning of ch. 5. I didn't think a writer as good as you, would be so upset over a few reviews. Considering how many hits you have, this shouldn't be an issue.
The story: I've been following this story from the beginning and I love it. I love the inner monologue you do at the beginning of each chapter. They're hilarious. The flow of your story is very fluid, and the plot is developing beautifully. I can't wait until you release more chapters. I hope you continue this story, it would be cruel to stop. As to the ItaSasu thing, I kind of already thought something would happen like that since Itachi glared out the window when Naruto and Sakura came to Sasuke's house. I guess it was the way you phrased it that made me think Itachi was a little possessive of Sasuke. I wonder if he'll try to interfere with Naruto and Sasuke's relationship. So many interesting possibiliities. I hope you update soon.
Ja! ^_^
About the reviews: As you've probably noticed, you won't be able to please everyone here...that's the way it is throughout the entire world. So to get so upset that some reviewers complained about your long reviews and threaten to not continue the story is a little....well, not quite sure what to say, except don't be so sensitive. Continue doing what you want to do and ignore the things you don't like. And if you didn't expect some criticism, then you shouldn't post. I think most of them were mostly complaining because the chapter was over--they wanted to read more of your story. Needless to say, I was upset when I read your note at the beginning of ch. 5. I didn't think a writer as good as you, would be so upset over a few reviews. Considering how many hits you have, this shouldn't be an issue.
The story: I've been following this story from the beginning and I love it. I love the inner monologue you do at the beginning of each chapter. They're hilarious. The flow of your story is very fluid, and the plot is developing beautifully. I can't wait until you release more chapters. I hope you continue this story, it would be cruel to stop. As to the ItaSasu thing, I kind of already thought something would happen like that since Itachi glared out the window when Naruto and Sakura came to Sasuke's house. I guess it was the way you phrased it that made me think Itachi was a little possessive of Sasuke. I wonder if he'll try to interfere with Naruto and Sasuke's relationship. So many interesting possibiliities. I hope you update soon.
Ja! ^_^
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
no you did not just end it right there i can't believe you just did that jeesh making me wait all this time (and believe me i came here everyday to see if you updated) for you to update what do u update every saturday? Anyway this story is awsome the best:)
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey first of all I gotta ask if you're a boy or a girl. You're probably a girl but hey you never know eh?
Second...HURRY UP WITH YOUR NEXT FREAKEN CHAPTER THIS IS TOO FREAKEN CUTE!! eeeekkkkk!! I loooove the fact that Naruto and Sasuke are datying and stuff.
I'm gonna put a link to this story on my desk top and check it everyday so hurry the bloody hell up damn-it!!! *shakes fist*
Second...HURRY UP WITH YOUR NEXT FREAKEN CHAPTER THIS IS TOO FREAKEN CUTE!! eeeekkkkk!! I loooove the fact that Naruto and Sasuke are datying and stuff.
I'm gonna put a link to this story on my desk top and check it everyday so hurry the bloody hell up damn-it!!! *shakes fist*
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmm. i dont know how i never found this fic earlier. lol i read all 6 chapter in like umm well i dun really know but yea. lol. hehe and ur 19. lol wow almost 2 decades old. XD haha. j/k ...well sort of casue u r turning 20 nxt yr. haha. umm yea and i have another thing to say. just ingore the people who dun like the responding at the end. cause even if u do take it out its not going to make the fic any longer . so yea. just keep on with the comments. XD hahah and i like the author notes. their fun to read...4 me that is. lol.>_<
ummm yea about the fic itself. its really good. i seems like u portray them to the tee, in my eyes. and about Itachi is that y he was looking at Naruto with an evil glint? oh and 1 more thing the part where Sasuke was sending Naruto home. dosent Sasuke know where Naturp liive cause he sent him home b4? or did he walk?.....if u wort it then i prob didnt chatch it. lol. well i really like the fic. and please do continue! i'm looking foward 2 the next chappi! oh and sry for the really long comment. >_<
ummm yea about the fic itself. its really good. i seems like u portray them to the tee, in my eyes. and about Itachi is that y he was looking at Naruto with an evil glint? oh and 1 more thing the part where Sasuke was sending Naruto home. dosent Sasuke know where Naturp liive cause he sent him home b4? or did he walk?.....if u wort it then i prob didnt chatch it. lol. well i really like the fic. and please do continue! i'm looking foward 2 the next chappi! oh and sry for the really long comment. >_<
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
muahahaha... this is so cruel...
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
loved the new fic.
I also wish to add its very rude for those who wish to flame
even if they dont like the fic for a certain reason if you perfer else where go to
other places to flame perferably right now a place where "n00bs" like to flame is
www.Go-Gaia.com I would be more then happy to reccomend here.
I also wish to add its very rude for those who wish to flame
even if they dont like the fic for a certain reason if you perfer else where go to
other places to flame perferably right now a place where "n00bs" like to flame is
www.Go-Gaia.com I would be more then happy to reccomend here.
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was too cute. sasuke better get back at him for running away like that later. i'm glad you dont plan on giving up on this. keep up the great work! dont let those bad reviewers get to ya! ^__^