schedule
November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really love the part where u said Hinata was over protective of Nruto because i really think like that about Hinata, i really hope you'd update soon
Destiny C.
Destiny C.
schedule
November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay I have to say it Hinata is one cool character. I mean she can be sweet but one mean lady if she (or you) wishes.
schedule
November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have 2 tell u, so far ur the only one that makes this stories about Nru/Sasu seem so natural, as if they could happen in the cartoons or something like that, i hope u keep on writing because I can't wait for the next chapter.
Destiny C.
Destiny C.
schedule
November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey this story was tight i like it a lot and hope that you continue on to this story. Please don't let it end like that it should have a happy ending you might want of thing about getting this publish cause it just that great and hope that you finish this with a good ending
schedule
November 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love this story!!!! it's going so well, keep up the good work!
schedule
November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
a new title? how about: 'Rising Heat'? no idea where that came from cause your fic is like, going into war with love and watnot. hehe, the name sounds the opposite of your current title eh? o.O
i guess that name came about cause 1: the rest of the konoha troups are going into war; 2: it sorta implies how sasuke and naruto's relationship is like (like how the baby is being kept by a firey/red-coloured/something demon in naruto's womb - you never know, the little baby could come turning out to be a little rascal that gives quite a few people some headaches or veins popping); and 3: it just explains the horniness of all of the characters in your fic just perfectly *smiles!* lol. (tenten and konk was a really unexpected pairing but i LOVED how you expressed konk! he sounded awesome! even when he was in pervert mode!!)
don't ask me how i came up with it. it just did. i was supposed to be revising for my exams and your fic came to mind and argh...... - -' i'm going to fail at this rate.
well, i'm loving your fic and hope that kakashi and that are alright!!
i guess that name came about cause 1: the rest of the konoha troups are going into war; 2: it sorta implies how sasuke and naruto's relationship is like (like how the baby is being kept by a firey/red-coloured/something demon in naruto's womb - you never know, the little baby could come turning out to be a little rascal that gives quite a few people some headaches or veins popping); and 3: it just explains the horniness of all of the characters in your fic just perfectly *smiles!* lol. (tenten and konk was a really unexpected pairing but i LOVED how you expressed konk! he sounded awesome! even when he was in pervert mode!!)
don't ask me how i came up with it. it just did. i was supposed to be revising for my exams and your fic came to mind and argh...... - -' i'm going to fail at this rate.
well, i'm loving your fic and hope that kakashi and that are alright!!
schedule
October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Happy with the update. Keep it going. <3
schedule
October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Keep on updating! Thank you.
schedule
October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey
Just gonna leave a short review. I love your story, very well-written. Buuuuut your grammer is off. I would suggest getting a beta, in the first chapter you ask people to point out mistakes but it's a little too much to point out all at once. But i have to say you do pretty good for someone who's first language isn't english. I've seen worse from people's whose first language is english. I would offer to be your beta but I'm doing it for three other people now and I'm not sure I'd be able to do it in a timely manner, though I wouldn't mind having to wait a shorter time to get your next chapter. Anyways that's all, the grammer problems aren't so bad that they take away from the general quality of the story but if they were gone it would make the story better. But yea I can't wait til the story gets updated:D
Just gonna leave a short review. I love your story, very well-written. Buuuuut your grammer is off. I would suggest getting a beta, in the first chapter you ask people to point out mistakes but it's a little too much to point out all at once. But i have to say you do pretty good for someone who's first language isn't english. I've seen worse from people's whose first language is english. I would offer to be your beta but I'm doing it for three other people now and I'm not sure I'd be able to do it in a timely manner, though I wouldn't mind having to wait a shorter time to get your next chapter. Anyways that's all, the grammer problems aren't so bad that they take away from the general quality of the story but if they were gone it would make the story better. But yea I can't wait til the story gets updated:D
schedule
October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love the way you write it very good you dont have to be good a everything and i love this story its so good and cant wait for the next chapter and then the end of the story so hurry and finish soon