rate_review Reviews

*bows down to the author* A job well done! Congratulations! You had me in stitches the whole time, especially at the end when Naruto pulled the weapons case out of his rear. If I were Sasuke, I would howl with laughter too. Naruto's right, though - no one ever would look up his ass for weapons. And the line, "The famed speed of the Konoha ninjas, honed by perverts." Genius, and so true at the same time, especially from Sasuke's POV.

I wish I could be of some help and provide you with some suggestions to improve your writing, but I didn't notice anything that needed improving. If I spot anything next time I read it, I'll let you know. And I completely agree with you about the whole "it's vs its" and "they're vs their" rant. It definitely isn't too much to ask authors to look over their work before posting it. I'm an author myself and know that sometimes mistakes can be overlooked, but that's what double-checking and betas are for. *hugs her wonderful beta who has been a big help in improving her grammar*

I look forward to the next installment and am confident it will be as entertaining as the first chapter. I'll be watching for it. ^__^

more please?

Ah, the rantings of an author with grammar. Remember that mistakes can happen, but I do agree with you. We do have to remember that English is also a second language for many writers.

As for a sequel, I would love to see one. There can never be too many NaruSasu fics out there, and you write very well.

I'm looking forward to your next work.

I am thoroughly enjoying your firm grip on the awe inspiring possibilities of chalkra,demon power ,the boys et al.Fuck I am giggling like fiend, right f'n on! This is so incindiary.I love it.I want so much more.Please.....and thank you.

Nice fic.. please write more soon!

Whahahaha!!! Oh, I definatly want to be in Sasuke's place when Naruto has that finger up his ass. For some non-perverted reason I found it so funny. XD
And you are one evil author for quiting the second chapter there... I read 'Please' and blinked when I found no more and I would have to wait for the next chapter...TT__TT (Some authors ussualy get stricken by a writers block)...
But heck, I want more!!! I want super-seme Naruto!!! X3

Funny...looking forward to the next chapter!!

That was absolutely wonderful. I laughed at the end but my favorite line of the whole story is still "The famed speed of the Konoha ninjas, honed by perverts." Just that whole paragraph topped neatly with THAT line...from Sasuke. It was just too great! Alright, so at the beginning it kinda seemed like you switched tense back and forth a little, but that just might have been me. Lord knows Cecilia catches me at it sometimes too so...yeah, might have been just me. Anyway, THERE SHOULD BE A LEMON! Please?

Well, chapter 2 was very nice. Short, but nice. I like the warm fuzzyness. You are doing a good job with the relationship aspects of the pair. Looking forward to the next chapter! Are you planning this to be ongoing, or is it just going to be a few chapters? gah...my brain is empty so I'll stop babbling... Good luck with chapter 3!

W o o w.I think this is probably one of the best written hottest think I have read.The comment about his love of power,the custom chest piece,hooping the lock set,the power of kyubi,the chakra in the air,Sasuke's responce.I'll say it againWow.Gawd.More please.The dialogue is great,hot and snappy.Wish i could express this better but...I read.