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That was some of the best Naruto smut I've ever read. I like the idea of them showing off their weapons. And I think that if any would could make Sasuke submit it would be Naruto. Very nicely done. If there is more to come then I can't wait. :) Good job and thanks for writing this.

man i love this. please you have got to update and i love a top naruto, *rowr* baby. Please update soon

*grins* I really, really enjoyed that. First, I was impressed by how well-written it was. Second, I absolutely loved the concept. A weapons check? For a moment, when I was reading the summary, I thought that it was a euphemism for Other Things and braced myself for a shoddily written fic with a shaky basis for smut. Therefore, I was completely and totally taken by surprise by the great characterization, the completely in-character (as possible for a timeskip/future fic) weapons check between Sasuke and Naruto, and the general hilarity of Naruto's last weapon cache. I adored Sasuke's last reaction and his thoughts - it was sweet, in a way, and very cute. =)

*laughs* And perhaps it's just me, but after reading that bit about Naruto's hidden weapon cache, I'd think he'd be a Bottom rather than a Top. ^_~ But then, this is me waving my SasuNaru flag, as opposed to my NaruSasu one. XD

Excellently written. Thank you for sharing!

(Are you posting this on ff.net, too?)

**Wolf**

Bravo! I enjoyed this! Also enjoyed your ranting! (I just love a good rant.) Here's to amusement! *Clapping* You are a linguist? GAH! I had an English professor that was a linguist...damn was that guy anal!!! He always bitched at me about commas...So now I'm traumatized by commas...I like dots better anyways...Damn bastard...he never did bitch about my lack of spelling ability, but he always pointed out the "Incorrect" commas. Which do you think is more useful: the ability to spell, or the ability to use commas properly? I'm only asking because you seem to know what you are talking about, as is evident in this superior piece of writing. The Naruto on top thing...yay! I just love a dominant Naruto. Dobe...ah...well, i have nothing against dobe...it's cute...really. I, however, prefer Dead Last. LOL! To each his/her own then! XD Japanese words...hmm...I myself am torn with that delemma. You are correct in in stating that some things do not transfer properly, some things just sound better when spoken in Japanese...a troublesome annoyance. What i dislike is seeing full lines of Japanese dailogue for no reason, and then it switches back to Engilsh... Also a number of other things, but then, who am i to bitch? LOL! Another chapter? Oh yes! I think i would enjoy that very much! Well, I hope I have ammused you with my review, it was a good couple minutes spent typing. Perhaps we shall meet again next chapter! Bye then! ~Dead

You have my adoration and whatever the hell else you can and want to claim, seriously.

Secondly, and more importantly, thank you so very, very much for writing a NaruxSasu fic. It's just so hard to find a decent Naruto topper these days. Then again, I suppose I can't blame anyone; the general consensus is SasuxNaru. Either way, you just made me adore you even more.

Hm... what else, what else. Erm, well I love the whole thing, totally and absolutely. The ending... the weapons up his behind -- I thought you'd like to know I sputtered rather comically. Almost choked, almost. I honestly haven't found something so interesting in a while.

I'll be looking forward to your updates. So write more soon, please and thank you!

Yay, a fellow grammar-nazi. =3 I'll help you HULK SMASH! the idiots who confuse "its" and "it's", I will. It's on my list of Top Ten Piss-Offs, along with people using "ur" in scanlations/subtitles/fanfictions and small yapping dogs.

Anyway, moving on. Awesome fanfic so far. The beginning was especially intriguing. I'm very excited for the next chapter, with Seme!Naruto. Poor Naruto is usually suck on the bottom. Now Sasuke can finally feel what it's like. =P

I'll keep checking back, so please post the next chapter when you can. ^^ I won't threaten you for an update, since I know we all (er, most of us) have those life things to attend to, but do write when you can, 'kay? ^^

Quality writing, quality ideas, quality over quantity.
I shall build a shrine to you.
...Out of the drool I have secreted during the reading of your story, lol!
I can not describe how much more a good almost-but-not-quite-ravishing-each-other romance for NaruSasu hits me than a well-this-sucks-but-they're-in-bed PWP-ish one. (PWPs are fine I think, but... not without... you know, I read your writing, so I know you know.)
I don't like how so many authors substitute quantity for quality, and this consoles me when I feel what I'm writing isn't long enough though I'd spent three hours on a single page, lol... it's amazing that I got to read you just now, to help seal my conviction that something a third as long as some stories can impact a person and say so much more than something that just rambles. It's really important for me to remember, as a brand new writer, and your fic here is a great example of it. Jam-packed with images and good words and EMOTION. You. Captured. That moment. ::loves you::
And Yes, I said "NaruSasu", not the other way around.
I COULD NOT AGREE MORE. Naruto-sama all the way, Sasuke-chan too.
(Though there's no reason they can't switch if they really really <3 each other, at least in Jaxland, lol.)
Anyway, keep writing or I'll - I'll scream. Yes I will!
::is trying to write something for the first time in her life, so it occured to her to review you because of that, because really she doesn't hardly ever review, so feel really really special and send cash::
Oh yeah, I'm a language whore myself, lol... I share the same pet-peeves and probably a healthy assload more than what you already listed. ( :
<3Jaxxy<3!!! !! !

Ah, finally! Someone after my own heart! I have been ranting about the "it's" and "you're" promblem for AGES, and NO-ONE LISTENS!!! Honestly, I wouldn't mind being called the "grammar police" by my family and friends if they would actually TAKE MY ADVICE FOR ONCE!!! ...Okay, as you said, rant over. ^^ I really enjoyed your fic -- very interesting idea, and very well done. I especially liked your characterizations and descriptions. Oh, and the fact that it was humorous and had an excellent ending didn't hurt...... ^___~ I also appreciated your comments at the end; aside from the obvious *points up* I am also a language person who happens to adore both Japanese and Latin (wonderful language!) and who aspires to learn them both...eventually........ ^^ But as I was saying, I'm glad that you chose not to incorporate too much Japanese in your fic, for two reasons: 1) I don't know that much of the language yet, and it can be disruptive when I'm reading a fic and have to go look up what a word means or scroll down to the bottom of the page to read a definition, and 2) People often use Japanese words when they don't know what they mean or how to spell/use them properly, and as a result I've grown sick and tired of it. (Forgive the sentence ending with a prepositions there; it's late. ^^ ) Oh, and by the way..... that "-ne" comment was very, very interesting -- I never noticed that before, so I had one of those "......no WAY! That's sooooooo COOL!!!" moments, if you know what I mean. ^___~ Anyway~ I truely enjoyed this, and I look forward to seeing where you take the story line from here, as well how you develop Sasuke's and Naruto's relationship. Keep up the good work and update ASAP, k? (And just because I can't help myself...) Ja ne!!! ^^